List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "It's a easy and time consuming activity" which is contradictory. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why making a list is helpful with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save time and avoid forgetting important items. For instance, last week, my list ensured I bought everything I needed for a party without making extra trips.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear expressions like "household core" and "it's a time consuming". Try to use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Also, use linking words to explain how making lists helps you manage time and reduce stress.

例: Yes, I make lists for my household chores, and they work well. By organizing tasks this way, I can manage my time efficiently and reduce stress because I know exactly what needs to be done each day.

提案: Avoid awkward phrases like "According to me" and incorrect grammar such as "doesn't like to making". Use natural expressions and provide specific reasons why some people avoid lists. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory and feel confident organizing tasks mentally. They might find writing notes unnecessary or time-consuming.

提案: Try to reduce filler words like "uh" and clarify your ideas. Use complete sentences and explain clearly why you prefer your phone for lists. Also, connect your ideas logically with linking words.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and easy to update. Additionally, I can set reminders or timers for important tasks, which helps me stay organized and on schedule.

× It's a easy and time consuming activity.

✓ It's an easy and time-consuming activity.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound like 'easy'. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× If we make a list for shopping, it's really helpful for me to umm.

✓ If we make a list for shopping, it's really helpful to me.

The phrase 'helpful for me to' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'helpful to me'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'umm', which should be omitted for clarity.

× Certainly, yes, I make a list for my household core.

✓ Certainly, yes, I make a list for my household chores.

The word 'core' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'chores' to refer to household tasks.

× It's really works because it's a time consuming and I I can manage our time according to my list and and it's really helpful for to relieve stress from my work.

✓ It really works because it's time-consuming and I can manage my time according to my list, and it's really helpful to relieve stress from my work.

'It's really works' is incorrect; 'It really works' is correct. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'. 'Our time' should be 'my time' to match the subject. 'Helpful for to relieve' is incorrect; it should be 'helpful to relieve'. Also, repeated words like 'I I' and 'and and' should be removed.

× According to me, some human beings doesn't like to making a list for shopping and another things.

✓ According to me, some human beings don't like making a list for shopping and other things.

'Doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with the plural subject 'some human beings'. 'To making' is incorrect; it should be 'making'. 'Another things' is incorrect; it should be 'other things'.

× They think that they can organize everything on on my own and they don't need to write any notes for the things.

✓ They think that they can organize everything on their own and they don't need to write any notes for things.

The phrase 'on on my own' is incorrect; it should be 'on their own' to match the subject 'they'. 'For the things' is better as 'for things' for general reference.

× I prefer to make a list on, uh, in, in my phone because, uh, it's uh, easy.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it's easy.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to using a phone. Also, filler words like 'uh' should be omitted for clarity.

× And when I feel something is, uh, finish or I'm in, we need a really, uh, important thing.

✓ And when I feel something is finished or I need a really important thing,

'Finish' should be 'finished' to be the past participle describing the state. The phrase 'I'm in, we need' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'I need'. Filler words 'uh' should be removed.

× Then I set a timer in my phone for that work.

✓ Then I set a timer on my phone for that task.

The preposition 'in' should be 'on' when referring to setting something on a phone. 'That work' is better expressed as 'that task' for clarity.