List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est claire mais pourrait être améliorée en évitant la répétition et en ajoutant des détails spécifiques. Par exemple, utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre la réponse plus fluide et donnez un exemple précis de ce que vous achetez habituellement.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember essential items, such as groceries and household supplies. Moreover, it saves me time by preventing unnecessary purchases.

提案: Votre réponse est bonne mais contient des erreurs grammaticales et des répétitions. Essayez d'utiliser des phrases plus courtes et des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence. Soyez plus précis sur les types de tâches que vous listez.

例: Yes, I usually make a to-do list for my work because it helps me stay organized. For instance, I list tasks like replying to emails and preparing reports, which ensures I don't forget anything important.

提案: Votre réponse est incomplète et manque de clarté. Il est important de terminer vos phrases et d'expliquer clairement vos idées. Utilisez des exemples précis et des mots de liaison pour structurer votre réponse.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it stressful. For example, a friend of mine feels overwhelmed by lists, which makes her avoid using them altogether.

提案: Votre réponse est interrompue et manque de conclusion. Essayez de compléter vos idées et d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour une meilleure fluidité. Donnez un exemple clair de pourquoi le téléphone est plus pratique.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and easy to update. For instance, I can quickly add or remove items while shopping, which is not possible with paper lists.

× I don't forget all the task, all the work that I need that needs to be done, so making a list also saves me time.

✓ I don't forget all the tasks, all the work that I need that needs to be done, so making a list also saves me time.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple items. Using singular 'task' here is incorrect as it does not agree with the context of multiple tasks to be done.

× I feel it's a personal choice making a list work for some people, but at the same time it doesn't work for all.

✓ I feel making a list is a personal choice that works for some people, but at the same time it doesn't work for everyone.

The original sentence has awkward structure and missing linking verbs. Correcting it improves clarity and grammatical correctness by properly linking the subject and predicate.

× For example, a friend of mine does not like making lists because it makes her overwhelmed, so I feel maybe because of.

✓ For example, a friend of mine does not like making lists because it makes her feel overwhelmed, so I think maybe that's the reason.

The phrase 'makes her overwhelmed' is incorrect; it should be 'makes her feel overwhelmed'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion for clarity.

× In the past, I used to make a list on the paper, which did not prove very helpful for me, because I could.

✓ In the past, I used to make lists on paper, which did not prove very helpful for me, because I could not always carry them.

'A list' should be plural 'lists' to match the context of repeated action. Also, 'on the paper' is better as 'on paper'. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.