List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, and use simple, correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'player player mind'.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember what to buy and avoid forgetting important items.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid repetition. Clearly state your opinion and support it with reasons.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for my work because it helps me stay organized. Although sometimes distractions occur, the list keeps me focused on my tasks.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your ideas clearly and directly. Use simple sentences and provide specific reasons.

例: Some people do not like making lists because they feel it takes too much time and they prefer to remember tasks mentally.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Clearly state your preference and explain why, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is easy to carry and helps me manage my schedule efficiently, unlike paper lists which can be inconvenient to carry around.

× It's a make a list of what I am shopping and what I am going to shopping because a list is used to have player player mind and what to buy and what to bought in the store which I always do.

✓ I make a list of what I am shopping for and what I am going to shop for because a list is used to keep a clear mind about what to buy and what to buy in the store, which I always do.

The verb 'shopping' needs the preposition 'for' to be correct in this context (Grammar Problem Type ID: 8). Also, 'going to shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'going to shop for'. The phrase 'what to bought' is incorrect; it should be 'what to buy' because 'to' is followed by the base form of the verb. The phrase 'have player player mind' is unclear and likely a mistake; it is corrected to 'keep a clear mind' for clarity.

× Yes, I've absolutely made my list for my work because there should be always A to do list in my in my work because also for some people they might be like distractions, but sometimes I like I feel like distractions from other work.

✓ Yes, I've absolutely made my list for my work because there should always be a to-do list in my work. Also, for some people, they might be distracted, but sometimes I feel distracted by other work.

The phrase 'there should be always A to do list' has incorrect word order and article usage; it should be 'there should always be a to-do list' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11 and 22). The phrase 'they might be like distractions' is incorrect; it should be 'they might be distracted' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 8). The phrase 'I like I feel like distractions' is incorrect; it should be 'I feel distracted' for clarity and correctness.

× I don't know about many people, but some people in my son's group have don't have making this, making the habit of making this because they don't have that much time to concentrate on making lists, on certain things or on certain work.

✓ I don't know about many people, but some people in my son's group don't have the habit of making lists because they don't have much time to concentrate on making lists for certain things or certain work.

The phrase 'have don't have making this' is incorrect; it should be 'don't have the habit of making this' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12). Also, 'that much time' is acceptable but 'much time' is more natural here. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Happy for making a strong phone because it's easy to carry and maintain schedules. Maintain easy schedule by typing or writing in paper which is difficult to carry every to do everywhere before it's difficult.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because it's easy to carry and helps me maintain my schedule. Maintaining an easy schedule by typing or writing on paper is difficult to carry everywhere, so before it was difficult.

The original sentence lacks a subject and has unclear pronoun usage; 'Happy for making a strong phone' is incorrect and changed to 'I prefer making a list on my phone' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12 and 23). The phrase 'writing in paper' should be 'writing on paper' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 11). The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.