List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯的逻辑连接词，且内容重复。建议简化表达，直接回答问题，并用一两个具体理由支持，避免冗余。

例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to be spontaneous. I enjoy discovering new things rather than following a strict plan.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议直接回答问题，结构清楚，使用连接词使内容连贯，并提供具体细节。

例: No, I don't make lists for work because I am currently a student. When I was a freelancer, I managed my tasks based on my own schedule and feelings, so lists were unnecessary.

提案: 回答内容不够具体，表达混乱且重复，缺少逻辑性。建议用简洁明了的语言说明原因，并举例说明。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring and restrictive. They prefer to keep life spontaneous and enjoy unexpected experiences.

提案: 回答偏离主题，缺少对纸质或手机列表的直接比较。建议直接回答问题，简洁说明偏好，并给出理由。

例: I don't usually make lists, but if I had to, I would prefer using my phone because it's convenient and easy to edit.

× As as I mentioned before, the answer is No2 because now I'm a student.

✓ As I mentioned before, the answer is No2 because now I'm a student.

句子中重复使用了“as”，属于代词使用错误。应去掉多余的“as”，使句子更通顺。

× Before I had a work but my work was freelancer which means that I followed everything and the deadline is also set by me myself.

✓ Before I had work but my work was freelance which means that I followed everything and the deadline was also set by myself.

“work”作为不可数名词时不加冠词“a”；“freelancer”应改为形容词“freelance”修饰“work”；“deadline”时态应与前文一致，改为过去时。

× I control everything just based on my emotion and feelings, so there is no use for me to make a list.

✓ I control everything just based on my emotions and feelings, so there is no use for me to make a list.

“emotion”应使用复数形式“emotions”，因为通常指多种情绪。

× That person must be me, right? You're asking, you're asking for me.

✓ That person must be me, right? You're asking me.

“You're asking for me”用法不当，应直接用“You're asking me”。

× If we make list and make everything just go through sleep by our by ourself, Why, why, why, why we survive here?

✓ If we make a list and do everything just by ourselves, why do we survive here?

句子结构混乱，缺少冠词“a”，动词搭配错误，“go through sleep”不合适，代词“ourself”应为“ourselves”，疑问句缺少助动词。

× Whatever paper or not or phone, they are not my choices.

✓ Whether paper or phone, they are not my choices.

“Whatever paper or not or phone”表达不清，应改为“Whether paper or phone”。

× My choices and my attitude towards life is that I enjoyed.

✓ My choices and my attitude towards life are that I enjoy.

主语为复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”；时态应为现在时“enjoy”，与上下文一致。

× I enjoy every day. I do everything I like, I prefer, I am a fan of no matter what I am crazy about, I just go and go to finish it.

✓ I enjoy every day. I do everything I like and prefer. I am a fan of whatever I am crazy about; I just go and finish it.

句子连接混乱，缺少连词，表达不清晰，需调整连接词和句子结构。

× I don't need a list, I don't need tomorrow.

✓ I don't need a list; I don't need tomorrow.

两个独立分句应使用分号或句号分开，避免逗号拼接错误。

× I just live in today living present and enjoy everything I want.

✓ I just live in today, living in the present and enjoy everything I want.

缺少介词“in the present”，使表达更完整自然。