List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけ、接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげると良いでしょう。

例: No, I usually remember what to buy, so I don't make a list. However, when I visit unfamiliar shops, I prepare by making a list to avoid forgetting anything.

提案: 文法の誤りがあり、表現がやや不自然です。より正確な文法を使い、接続詞を活用して理由と結果を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: I don't usually make lists at work, but when I have to do something new, I prepare carefully and make a detailed list to help me complete the task.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で繰り返しが多いです。理由を明確にし、簡潔で論理的な文章を作る練習をしましょう。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it hard to remember everything, and focusing on completing the list can distract them from important tasks.

提案: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現があります。より自然で簡潔な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, unlike paper, which I might forget to bring.

× I don't need any list usually.

✓ I don't usually need a list.

The word 'any' is incorrectly used with a singular countable noun 'list'. It should be 'a list' for singular countable nouns. Also, the adverb 'usually' is better placed before the verb 'need' for natural English word order.

× if I go to the shops where I really visit at that time I prepare for the shopping and make a list.

✓ if I go to the shops that I really visit at that time, I prepare for the shopping and make a list.

The relative pronoun 'where' is incorrectly used; 'that' is more appropriate when referring to 'shops'. Also, a comma is needed before the clause for clarity.

× I don't usually make a list at work, but if I need to do what I've never done before, at that time I need to prepare for that in detail.

✓ I don't usually make a list at work, but if I need to do something I've never done before, at that time I need to prepare for it in detail.

The phrase 'what I've never done before' is incorrect; 'something I've never done before' is the correct form. Also, 'that' is better replaced with 'it' to refer back to the task.

× So at that time I'm going to make a list what I'm going to do.

✓ So at that time I'm going to make a list of what I'm going to do.

The phrase 'make a list what' is incorrect; it should be 'make a list of what' to correctly link the list to its contents.

× I think because so many people can't remember all of the list, and if I, if we make a list and we're going to finish all of the list, I, we can't focus on what I'm going to do really.

✓ I think it's because many people can't remember the whole list, and if we make a list and we're going to finish all of it, we can't really focus on what we're going to do.

The phrase 'all of the list' is incorrect; 'the whole list' or 'all of it' is appropriate. Also, pronouns are inconsistent and should be unified for clarity.

× So I don't like, we don't like making a list.

✓ So I don't like making a list, and neither do we.

Mixing 'I' and 'we' in the same sentence causes confusion. The sentence should separate personal and group opinions clearly.

× I like to make a list on my phone because I don't carry any papers.

✓ I like to make a list on my phone because I don't carry any paper.

'Papers' is plural countable, but in this context, 'paper' as an uncountable noun is more appropriate to refer to paper in general.

× Usually I but only have my smartphone every day every time, so I think it's really useful for me to make a list on.

✓ Usually, I only have my smartphone with me every day, so I think it's really useful for me to make a list on it.

The original sentence has word order and missing words issues. 'I but only have' is incorrect; it should be 'I only have'. Also, 'make a list on' needs an object, so 'on it' is added to clarify that the list is made on the smartphone.