List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不够自然，比如“make a list to when I shop”应为“make a list when I shop”。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长且不连贯的表达，同时注意时态和介词的正确使用。

例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop. I only go shopping when I need essential items, but sometimes I end up buying things I didn't plan to.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但表达略显重复和啰嗦。建议使用更简洁的句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: No, I don't make lists for my work. I tried before, but it didn't help because I prefer to focus on the main tasks I can remember without writing them down.

提案: 这句话语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用合适的连接词。

例: Some people find detailed lists overwhelming because life is unpredictable and plans often change, so strict lists may not be effective.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“when if I make a list”。建议简化句子，注意时态和表达的准确性，使回答更自然流畅。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I can check and update them anytime, even when I'm on the move, without needing a pen.

× Actually, I don't usually make a list to when I shop, and I only go shop when it is going down on something essential, but when I actually entered the store I would randomly pack up some items I never thought I would buy.

✓ Actually, I don't usually make a list when I shop, and I only go shopping when it is about something essential, but when I actually enter the store I randomly pick up some items I never thought I would buy.

句中“make a list to when I shop”中的“to”多余，应去掉；“go shop”应改为“go shopping”，因为go后接动名词表示去做某事；“it is going down on something essential”表达不正确，改为“it is about something essential”更合适；“entered”应改为一般现在时“enter”，因为前文时态为一般现在时；“pack up”用词不当，改为“pick up”更符合语境。

× No, I don't make a list for my work. Actually I have tried it before but it doesn't work for me because I think I only focus on some core works that I could remember without particularly making a list.

✓ No, I don't make a list for my work. Actually, I have tried it before but it doesn't work for me because I think I only focus on some core work that I can remember without particularly making a list.

“core works”应改为不可数名词“core work”；“could remember”时态不合，应改为一般现在时“can remember”，因为表达的是习惯性事实。

× Some people may just let me find that detailed list is overwhelming and life is always unpredictable since things will change every time, so the rigid list isn't always makes effort.

✓ Some people may just find that detailed lists are overwhelming and life is always unpredictable since things change all the time, so a rigid list doesn't always help.

“may just let me find”结构错误，应改为“may just find”；“detailed list”应为复数“detailed lists”；“is overwhelming”主谓一致应改为“are overwhelming”；“things will change every time”表达不自然，改为“things change all the time”；“isn't always makes effort”语法错误，应改为“doesn't always help”。

× Definitely the latter one, because when if I make a list on my phone, I could check it in every time even when I'm moving. And of course I can make some modification and mark in every time without picking a pen.

✓ Definitely the latter one, because if I make a list on my phone, I can check it anytime even when I'm moving. And of course, I can make some modifications and mark it anytime without picking up a pen.

“when if”重复，应去掉“when”；“could”改为“can”表示能力；“check it in every time”表达不正确，改为“check it anytime”；“modification”应为复数“modifications”；“mark in every time”表达错误，改为“mark it anytime”；“picking a pen”应为“picking up a pen”。