List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why you make a list.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list before I go to the store because it helps me remember what I need to buy and prevents me from forgetting items at home.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to explain how making lists helps you stay organised.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me stay organised. For example, I list tasks in order of priority, which makes it easier to manage my time effectively.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid repetition and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find them restrictive and stressful. Instead, they prefer to keep their plans flexible and decide what to do spontaneously.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to directly answer the question and explain your preference with clear reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I prefer to make lists both on my iPad and on paper. Using paper helps me remember what I did yesterday, while the iPad is convenient for updating my lists anytime.

× Yes I usually make I usually make less and go to the shop be before because I I can see home not here and what can I buy so I always disturb.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list and go to the shop beforehand because I am at home, not here, and I can see what I can buy, so I am not disturbed.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors, including repetition, missing articles, and unclear phrasing. Correcting the sentence structure improves clarity and coherence by properly sequencing ideas and using appropriate articles and verb forms.

× Yes, I usually make a list for the work because it can be stay organized and season this and for example by listen task in order of paragraph I can imagine.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list for work because it helps me stay organized and plan tasks in order; for example, I can imagine the tasks in sequence.

The original sentence misuses prepositions such as 'for the work' and 'by listen task in order of paragraph'. Correct prepositions and clearer phrasing are needed to convey the intended meaning of organizing and planning tasks.

× Some people don't like making this because they find them to retract and stressful.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because they find them to be restrictive and stressful.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrectly used to refer to 'making lists', and 'them' lacks a clear antecedent. Also, 'retract' is incorrect; the intended word is 'restrictive'. Correct pronouns and word choice improve clarity.

× They prefer to keep keep their plans flexible and decide what do what you do for this additional for some people.

✓ They prefer to keep their plans flexible and decide what to do; this works better for some people.

The sentence has redundant words and incorrect pronoun usage ('you do'). Correcting pronouns and sentence structure clarifies the meaning and removes redundancy.

× Yes, I always make a list in my iPad and on the paper because I can, I can know in this paper today or or yesterday, I do some words and I can, I can have very interesting things.

✓ Yes, I always make a list on my iPad and on paper because I can see what I wrote today or yesterday, and I can have very interesting notes.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'my iPad'; 'on' is correct. The sentence also contains unclear phrases like 'do some words' which is corrected to 'see what I wrote'. Proper preposition use and clearer wording improve understanding.