List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'when I was shopping' and 'manipulate the price'. Try to use more natural expressions and correct tense. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me stick to my budget and avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information ('sometimes I sing'). Try to answer directly and clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Also, be specific about how lists help you.

例: Sometimes I make lists for my study tasks, which helps me organise my work and remember important deadlines.

提案: Your answer has repetition and some grammatical mistakes ('making lids' instead of 'making lists', 'may doesn't work'). Try to avoid repeating phrases and use correct grammar. Provide clear reasons with linking words for coherence.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming and believe that lists don't help them follow through with their plans.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains filler words and awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Use more natural expressions and correct grammar, such as 'writing lists' instead of 'write list'.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because I find it more satisfying, and it encourages me to improve my handwriting compared to typing on my phone.

× I think making lists when I was shopping is very helpful to my budget and it can also manipulate the price that I'm going to spend next.

✓ I think making lists when I shop is very helpful to my budget and it can also influence the amount that I'm going to spend next.

The phrase 'when I was shopping' incorrectly uses the past continuous tense, which does not fit the general statement about habit. The present simple tense 'when I shop' is appropriate here to express habitual action. Also, 'manipulate the price' is not idiomatic; 'influence the amount' is clearer and more natural.

× I think making lists when I was shopping is very helpful to my budget and it can also manipulate the price that I'm going to spend next.

✓ I think making lists when I shop is very helpful for my budget and it can also influence the amount that I'm going to spend next.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'helpful'; the correct preposition is 'for' when indicating benefit or advantage to something.

× I usually make a list for my study.

✓ I usually make a list for my studies.

The noun 'study' in this context should be plural 'studies' to refer to academic work in general. Also, 'for my studies' is the correct collocation.

× making lists can actually, uh, be effective to someone.

✓ making lists can actually, uh, be effective for someone.

The adjective 'effective' is correctly followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating the person who benefits from something.

× Well, I think some people don't like making lids because they think it is time consuming and it may doesn't work to them.

✓ Well, I think some people don't like making lists because they think it is time-consuming and it may not work for them.

The word 'lids' is a typo and should be 'lists'. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. The phrase 'may doesn't work' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'may not work'. The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'for' is the correct preposition.

× it may doesn't work to them.

✓ it may not work for them.

The verb phrase 'may doesn't work' is incorrect; 'may not work' is correct. Also, the preposition 'to' should be 'for' when indicating the person affected.

× I think it is very fulfilling to write list on paper and I will force my handwriting to be more beautiful than, uh, taking notes on phone.

✓ I think it is very fulfilling to write lists on paper and I will try to make my handwriting more beautiful than, uh, taking notes on my phone.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match the context. The preposition 'on' is correct with 'paper'. The phrase 'force my handwriting to be more beautiful' is unnatural; 'try to make my handwriting more beautiful' is better. Also, 'taking notes on phone' should be 'taking notes on my phone' to specify possession.