List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and repeating phrases. Also, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, you can say you make a list to avoid forgetting items and to shop efficiently.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget things easily. Writing the list helps me remember all the items I need and makes my shopping more convenient.

提案: Avoid repeating words and filler sounds to make your answer more fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Be specific about how making lists helps your work.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because I have a weak memory. By writing down tasks, I can remember them better, which helps me stay organized and complete my work efficiently.

提案: Improve clarity by avoiding repeated words and filler sounds. Use correct grammar and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to explain reasons.

例: Some people do not like making lists because they believe it takes too much time. Since they have a good memory, they prefer to remember things without writing them down, so making lists is not effective for them.

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repeated words and filler phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your preference logically. Be specific about the advantages of using your phone for lists.

例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because I always carry it with me. Unlike paper lists, I don't have to worry about forgetting them at home, which makes it more convenient.

× Actually I have a weak memory, so I easily forget all the things.

✓ Actually I have a weak memory, so I easily forget all the things.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× So I prefer to write the older things on the uh during my shopping because it it uh, it helps me to uh shopping conveniently.

✓ So I prefer to write the older things down during my shopping because it helps me to shop conveniently.

The preposition 'on the' is incorrect here; 'write down' is the correct phrasal verb. Also, 'helps me to shopping' should be 'helps me to shop' because 'help' is followed by the base form of the verb.

× Actually, I make the list for my work as, uh, as I mentioned earlier, I have a weak memory, so I easily, uh, forgot, forget all that stuff.

✓ Actually, I make the list for my work as, uh, as I mentioned earlier, I have a weak memory, so I easily forget all that stuff.

The verb 'forgot' is past tense and does not fit here; the present tense 'forget' is appropriate because the context is general and ongoing.

× And by writing all this, uh, all the sort of the things I remember, uh, and which, which proves beneficial for me.

✓ And by writing all this, uh, all sorts of things, I remember, which proves beneficial for me.

The phrase 'all the sort of the things' is incorrect; it should be 'all sorts of things'. Also, the conjunction 'and which' is redundant; 'which' alone suffices.

× Some people do uh, do not like to making the lids because they consider that this method is consuming more time as they have a sharp memory and they easily remember all the all the all the stuff.

✓ Some people do not like making lists because they consider that this method consumes more time as they have a sharp memory and easily remember all the stuff.

The phrase 'do not like to making' is incorrect; it should be 'do not like making' because 'like' is followed by the gerund. Also, 'lids' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'lists'. 'Is consuming' should be 'consumes' to match the simple present tense.

× So they so the making the list regarding the things do not prove effective for them.

✓ So making the list regarding the things does not prove effective for them.

The phrase 'the making the list' is redundant; 'making the list' suffices. Also, 'do not prove' should be 'does not prove' to agree with the singular subject 'making the list'.

× Due to the advancement of the technology, I usually choose making the list on my mobile phone because as the mobile phone is all with me all the time and as making the list on paper, I sometimes I forget the list at home, so I face the different kind of difficulty.

✓ Due to the advancement of technology, I usually choose to make the list on my mobile phone because the mobile phone is always with me, and when I make the list on paper, I sometimes forget the list at home, so I face different kinds of difficulties.

'The technology' should be 'technology' without 'the' as it is uncountable here. 'Choose making' should be 'choose to make' because 'choose' is followed by the infinitive. 'As the mobile phone is all with me all the time' is awkward; 'the mobile phone is always with me' is better. 'As making the list on paper' should be 'when I make the list on paper'. 'Face the different kind of difficulty' should be 'face different kinds of difficulties' for correct plural and article usage.