List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, and how it helps you.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping for groceries because I tend to forget items otherwise. Therefore, the list helps me remember everything I need to buy and saves time at the market.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and ensure your answer is complete within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often make a list of my work tasks in the morning to plan my day effectively. For instance, I schedule time to attend patients in the evening and focus on my gym routine in the morning. This helps me stay organized and manage my time well.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to explain reasons. Keep your sentences simple and coherent.

例: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they prefer to go with the flow. They believe that planning can create pressure and limit their freedom, so they avoid it to stay relaxed.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas clearly. Also, explain why using your phone is convenient with specific details.

例: I mostly prefer making lists on my phone using the Notes app. Every day, I note down tasks and organise my schedule, including short breaks, which helps me stay productive. Using my phone is convenient because I always carry it with me, so I can check my list anytime.

× Yes, I always make a list when I go for a shopping for groceries or particularly groceries because in the market I usually forget the things so it give it remind me of what the things I need to purchase.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping for groceries, particularly because in the market I usually forget things, so it reminds me of what I need to purchase.

The phrase 'go for a shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping'. Also, 'give it remind me' is incorrect; it should be 'reminds me'. Prepositions like 'for' are not used before 'shopping' in this context. Removing unnecessary articles and correcting verb forms improves clarity.

× Yes, I always make a list when I go for a shopping for groceries or particularly groceries because in the market I usually forget the things so it give it remind me of what the things I need to purchase.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping for groceries, particularly because in the market I usually forget things, so it reminds me of what I need to purchase.

The verb 'give' does not agree with the singular subject 'it'. It should be 'gives' or better 'reminds' to match the subject. Subject-verb agreement is essential for grammatical correctness.

× Of more oftenly I make the list of the work in the morning time.

✓ More often, I make a list of the work in the morning.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'often'. Also, 'of more oftenly' is misplaced; 'More often' should be at the beginning. Proper adverb placement improves sentence flow and correctness.

× Of more oftenly I make the list of the work in the morning time.

✓ More often, I make a list of the work in the morning.

The article 'the' before 'list' and 'work' is unnecessary here. Using 'a list' is correct because it refers to one of many possible lists. Also, 'morning time' is better as 'morning' for natural usage.

× Like I need to attend the patients in the evening time and need to focus on my gym in the morning.

✓ For example, I need to attend to patients in the evening and focus on my gym in the morning.

The sentence lacks proper connectors and prepositions. 'Attend the patients' should be 'attend to patients'. 'In the evening time' is better as 'in the evening'. Adding 'For example' clarifies the sentence structure.

× So I will plan my work with the.

✓ So I will plan my work accordingly.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'accordingly' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× From my point of view, I think that few people don't like to plan their day.

✓ From my point of view, I think that some people don't like to plan their day.

'Few' implies almost none, which may not be intended. 'Some' is more appropriate to indicate a portion of people. Correct pronoun usage ensures the intended meaning is conveyed.

× They go according to the flow because planning make some don't they believe that if they plan things they will not do though there will be a lot of pressure on them, for instance.

✓ They go with the flow because some believe that if they plan things, they will not do them, and there will be a lot of pressure on them, for instance.

The original sentence has incorrect conjunctions and confusing structure. 'Go according to the flow' should be 'go with the flow'. The phrase 'planning make some don't they believe' is incorrect and restructured for clarity. Proper conjunctions and sentence structure improve understanding.

× I mostly prefer making list on phone.

✓ I mostly prefer making a list on my phone.

The article 'a' is needed before 'list' because it is a singular countable noun. Also, 'on phone' should be 'on my phone' to specify possession.

× There is a app in my phone called Notes where I daily I just note all the.

✓ There is an app on my phone called Notes where I daily note everything.

'A app' should be 'an app' because 'app' starts with a vowel sound. 'In my phone' should be 'on my phone' as apps are on devices. The sentence is also incomplete and corrected for clarity.

× There is a app in my phone called Notes where I daily I just note all the.

✓ There is an app on my phone called Notes where I daily note everything.

The sentence is incomplete and has redundant words. Removing the extra 'I' and completing the thought makes it grammatically correct.

× I make a list of the things and I organise my day with a short break which make me more productive.

✓ I make a list of things and organise my day with short breaks, which make me more productive.

'Make' should be 'makes' or 'which make' depending on the subject. Here, 'breaks' is plural, so 'make' is correct. Also, 'a short break' changed to 'short breaks' for generality. Removing unnecessary articles improves flow.

× So I usually prefer on my phone because it is very convenient to carry.

✓ So I usually prefer using my phone because it is very convenient to carry.

'Prefer on my phone' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'prefer using my phone'. Prepositions must be used correctly to convey meaning.