List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. For example, say "Yes, I do because it helps me find what I need easily and prevents me from forgetting items."

例: Yes, I do because it helps me find what I need easily and prevents me from forgetting items when I shop.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and smoother linking. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'also' properly, and correct grammar for better flow. For example, "Yes, I do, especially since I work in the kitchen. Before I start, I check the preparation list, and after finishing, I write it down again."

例: Yes, I do, especially since I work in the kitchen. Before I start, I check the preparation list, and after finishing, I write it down again.

提案: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a clear reason with proper sentence structure and avoid repetition. For example, "Some people don't like making lists because they have a good memory or simply prefer not to bother."

例: Some people don't like making lists because they have a good memory or simply prefer not to bother.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and is a bit unclear. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. For example, "I prefer making lists on paper because writing things down helps me think more clearly than using my phone."

例: I prefer making lists on paper because writing things down helps me think more clearly than using my phone.

× Yes I do, it makes me easier to find what I want to buy and barely forget to buy what I wanted to.

✓ Yes I do, it makes it easier for me to find what I want to buy and to barely forget to buy what I want.

The phrase 'makes me easier' is incorrect; it should be 'makes it easier for me' to correctly express the idea. Also, 'barely forget' is awkward; 'to barely forget' is better, but ideally 'to avoid forgetting' would be clearer. The verb 'wanted' should be 'want' to maintain present tense consistency.

× So I tend.

✓ So I tend to do that.

The sentence 'So I tend.' is incomplete and lacks an object or complement. Adding 'to do that' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× I prefer to make a list when I do shopping.

✓ I prefer to make a list when I go shopping.

The phrase 'do shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping' when referring to the activity.

× Especially I am working in the kitchen.

✓ Especially when I am working in the kitchen.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a conjunction to connect it properly. Adding 'when' clarifies the condition.

× So before start working I need to check a preparation list.

✓ So before starting work, I need to check a preparation list.

After 'before', the verb should be in the -ing form ('starting'). Also, 'start working' can be simplified to 'starting work' for naturalness.

× So also I when I finish working I need to write down a preparation list.

✓ Also, when I finish working, I need to write down a preparation list.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing commas. Rearranging and adding commas improves clarity and correctness.

× Some people, for example, they have a good memory or and I know some people who are tend to be lazy, they don't.

✓ Some people, for example, have a good memory, and I know some people who tend to be lazy; they don't.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'some people'. Also, 'are tend to be' is incorrect; it should be 'tend to be'. The conjunctions are also corrected for clarity.

× They don't. They don't make a list, a list.

✓ They don't make a list.

The repetition and sentence fragment 'They don't.' is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity.

× I prefer make a list by using a paper because I like to write down the things and makes me more my brain more clear than using a phone, so I prefer to use.

✓ I prefer to make a list using paper because I like to write things down, and it makes my brain clearer than using a phone, so I prefer to use paper.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to make'. 'By using a paper' is incorrect; 'using paper' is correct. 'Makes me more my brain more clear' is ungrammatical; it should be 'it makes my brain clearer'. The sentence ending 'so I prefer to use' is incomplete and needs 'paper' to complete the thought.