List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember what to buy. However, sometimes my mom asks me to buy certain ingredients, and I just remember them without writing them down.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại, làm câu trả lời thiếu tự nhiên. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I have important tasks. It helps me organize my schedule and manage my time more effectively. For example, I can prioritize tasks and ensure everything is completed on time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng thiếu sự hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu, sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

例: Some people don't like making lists because carrying a notebook and pen everywhere is inconvenient. Therefore, using a smartphone is better since it allows them to organize tasks more effectively and easily.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không mạch lạc. Hãy sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý hợp lý hơn.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient than paper. Although paper has its advantages, carrying a smartphone everywhere makes it easier to access my lists anytime.

× Actually, I thought usually make a shopping list because my mom is the person the main persons go to the supermarket.

✓ Actually, I usually make a shopping list because my mom is the main person who goes to the supermarket.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing relative pronouns, causing confusion. The phrase 'I thought usually make' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually make'. Also, 'the person the main persons go' is incorrect; it should be 'the main person who goes'. This correction improves clarity and grammatical structure.

× However, if she needs some ingredients, she will tell me and to buy some ingredients and I I I just remember in my mind instead of writing doubts because it's.

✓ However, if she needs some ingredients, she will tell me to buy them, and I just remember them in my mind instead of writing them down because it's easier.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetition and unclear phrases like 'and to buy some ingredients and I I I'. The correction removes redundancy, clarifies the action, and completes the thought with 'because it's easier'. This improves sentence coherence and grammatical correctness.

× Yes. I usually make uh, at least when I have an important task in a day, so it helps me organize my schedule and uh, manage my time uh, more effectively.

✓ Yes. I usually make a list at least when I have an important task in a day, so it helps me organize my schedule and manage my time more effectively.

The original sentence is missing the object 'a list' after 'make', which is necessary for clarity. Removing filler words like 'uh' also improves fluency. The correction adds the missing noun and streamlines the sentence.

× For example, uh, I can buy uh, this thing uh, my words, I can prioritize the tech and ensure everything is done on time.

✓ For example, I can prioritize the tasks and ensure everything is done on time.

The original sentence contains filler words and unclear phrases like 'I can buy this thing my words' and 'prioritize the tech'. The correction removes fillers and corrects 'tech' to 'tasks', which fits the context better, improving clarity and grammatical correctness.

× From my perspective, some people don't want to make a list because they feel inconvenient to carry a notebook and a pen everywhere.

✓ From my perspective, some people don't want to make a list because they feel it is inconvenient to carry a notebook and a pen everywhere.

The phrase 'feel inconvenient to carry' is incorrect because 'inconvenient' is an adjective that needs a subject. Adding 'it is' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× So a smartphone digital device is the best way to you to do that.

✓ So a smartphone or digital device is the best way for you to do that.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and articles. 'To you to do that' is awkward; it should be 'for you to do that'. Also, 'smartphone digital device' is unclear; adding 'or' clarifies the meaning.

× For example, using digital device allow them to organize the task more effectively without.

✓ For example, using a digital device allows them to organize tasks more effectively.

The verb 'allow' should be 'allows' to agree with the singular subject 'using a digital device'. Also, 'the task' should be plural 'tasks' to generalize. The sentence was incomplete; the correction completes it properly.

× Well, I prefer make a list on my phone to paper it because digital device is more convenient than the paper with, uh, the even though papers still have you a lot of thing, but, uh, with the smartphone you carrying everywhere that that is easier device.

✓ Well, I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because digital devices are more convenient than paper. Even though paper still has its uses, carrying a smartphone everywhere is easier.

The original sentence has multiple errors: missing 'to' after 'prefer', incorrect comparison 'to paper it', singular/plural issues with 'digital device' and 'papers', and awkward phrasing. The correction fixes verb forms, article usage, and sentence structure for clarity and correctness.