List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'just'. Also, structure your response clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words such as 'however' or 'but'.

例: Yes, I sometimes make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized and remember what to buy. However, I find that making a list can be time-consuming and not always helpful.

提案: Improve clarity by correcting grammar and using linking words. Also, be more specific about how the list helps you manage your work.

例: Yes, I always make lists for different parts of my work because they help me prioritize tasks and manage my time effectively. This method works well for me.

提案: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why some people avoid lists.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they believe it takes too much time and they prefer to rely on their memory, thinking it works just as well.

提案: Avoid incomplete sentences and improve grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide specific reasons.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because technology makes it easier to organize and access them. If I write lists on paper, I often lose them.

× And yes, sometimes, uh, because, uh, in one hand, I think that making this keeps me organized to, uh, know what I want to buy.

✓ And yes, sometimes, uh, because, uh, on one hand, I think that making this keeps me organized to, uh, know what I want to buy.

The phrase 'in one hand' is incorrect; the correct idiomatic expression is 'on one hand' when presenting contrasting ideas.

× Uh, but on the other hand, I think that sometimes making a list, uh, is time consuming and wouldn't be so helpful. Just.

✓ Uh, but on the other hand, I think that sometimes making a list, uh, is time-consuming and wouldn't be so helpful.

The term 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective before a noun or in this context.

× Yes, absolutely. I make a list for the different side of my work because it can be so helpful and I know what to do in in which time.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I make a list for the different sides of my work because it can be so helpful and I know what to do and when.

The phrase 'different side' should be plural 'different sides' to match the context. Also, 'in in which time' is incorrect; 'and when' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× I think that some people do not like making a list for themselves because they think that it would be something like time consuming or it not.

✓ I think that some people do not like making a list for themselves because they think that it would be something like time-consuming or not.

The phrase 'or it not' is incorrect; it should be 'or not' to properly negate the previous clause. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'.

× It is not necessary for them and they can memorize anything that they want and their brain work work as well as it is possible, so they don't use it.

✓ It is not necessary for them and they can memorize anything that they want and their brain works as well as possible, so they don't use it.

The verb 'work' should be in third person singular form 'works' to agree with the singular subject 'brain'. The repeated word 'work work' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'works'. The phrase 'as well as it is possible' is better expressed as 'as well as possible' for naturalness.

× Actually, because of advanced in technology, I prefer to have my list in my phone because nowadays I will last it if I write it in paper.

✓ Actually, because of advances in technology, I prefer to have my list on my phone because nowadays I will lose it if I write it on paper.

The phrase 'because of advanced in technology' is incorrect; it should be 'because of advances in technology'. The preposition 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' when referring to digital content. The verb 'last' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'lose'. The preposition 'in paper' should be 'on paper'.

× But if it's in my phone, it is so organized and and then.

✓ But if it's in my phone, it is so organized and easy to manage.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and and then,' which is incomplete and unclear. The correction provides a complete and coherent ending to the sentence.