List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和表达不够自然。建议使用更地道的表达方式，并避免重复。例如，可以直接说“I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what to buy.”

例: I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what to buy and prevents me from forgetting important items.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地回答，并用连接词丰富内容。例如：“Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me organize tasks efficiently.”

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me organize tasks efficiently and ensures I don't forget any important duties.

提案: 回答不清楚且含糊，缺乏具体内容。建议给出合理的原因并用连接词连接观点。例如：“Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive or time-consuming.”

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and prefer to be spontaneous in their daily activities.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议用更准确的表达并补充理由。例如：“I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and I can easily edit them.”

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient, easy to edit, and I always have my phone with me.

× For me that make a list is very important as I know what I should buy or not.

✓ For me, making a list is very important as I know what I should buy or not.

The phrase 'that make a list' is incorrect because 'make' should be in the gerund form 'making' to function as a noun here. Using 'making a list' correctly expresses the activity as a subject.

× When I shop I make a list.

✓ When I shop, I make a list.

A comma is needed after the introductory clause 'When I shop' to separate it from the main clause for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× For me that make a list is very important as I know what I should buy or not.

✓ For me, making a list is very important because I know what I should buy or not.

The conjunction 'as' is better replaced with 'because' to clearly express the reason. Also, a comma after 'For me' improves readability.

× When I make a list, I will know what I should do or not, so it is very convenient for me.

✓ When I make a list, I know what I should do or not, so it is very convenient for me.

Using 'will know' is unnecessary here because the sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'know' is more appropriate.

× Perhaps they have won openly.

✓ Perhaps they have their own reasons.

The phrase 'have won openly' is unclear and does not make sense in context. It seems the student intended to say 'have their own reasons' or similar. Correcting to a meaningful phrase improves clarity.

× I don't know what they they have won openly.

✓ I don't know what reasons they have.

The sentence is unclear and contains a repeated word 'they'. Rephrasing to 'I don't know what reasons they have' makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× As developer of technology, it is convenient for everyone to use phone.

✓ As a developer of technology, it is convenient for everyone to use a phone.

The article 'a' is needed before 'developer' to indicate one developer. Also, 'a phone' is better than 'phone' here to refer to any phone generally.

× We we can use phone to do many things.

✓ We can use phones to do many things.

The word 'we' is repeated mistakenly. Also, 'phones' should be plural to refer generally to mobile devices. Adding 'can' is correct for ability.