List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构不完整且有语法错误，导致表达不够清晰。建议练习完整句子表达，避免断句和语法错误，同时使用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because it helps me remember what I need to buy and saves time. Moreover, it makes my shopping more efficient and organized.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，且缺少连贯的连接词。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并用连接词连接句子，使回答更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because time is limited each day. It helps me organize my tasks and prioritize the most important ones first, so I can complete everything efficiently.

提案: 回答中有许多犹豫词和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议减少口头语，使用完整句子表达观点，并提供具体理由，使回答更有说服力。

例: In my opinion, some people dislike making lists because they feel it limits their free time and reduces their sense of control over their schedule.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当。建议注意语法正确性，使用恰当词汇，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer making lists on paper because if I use my phone, I might get distracted by other apps. Writing on paper helps me focus and see my list more clearly.

× Definitely yes we can leave before shopping can help me check what I need to buy and take my time when shopping.

✓ Definitely yes, making a list before shopping can help me check what I need to buy and take my time when shopping.

句子结构混乱，缺少逗号分隔，导致意思不清。应在“Definitely yes”后加逗号，并调整句子结构使其通顺。

× I don't need to. Thinking of what I have to buy when shopping around.

✓ I don't need to think about what I have to buy when shopping around.

句子断裂，缺少谓语动词，导致不完整。应将两句合并为完整句子。

× They also make the shopping more efficient and.

✓ They also make shopping more efficient.

句子末尾多余“and”，导致句子不完整，应去掉。

× Yes, absolutely, because the the time in one day is limited and you can live can help me to organize my talk and I can prioritize the most important thing first.

✓ Yes, absolutely, because the time in one day is limited and a list can help me organize my tasks and prioritize the most important things first.

句子结构混乱，重复“the”，“you can live”不合适，应改为“a list can”，并调整“talk”为“tasks”，使句意明确。

× I can prioritize the most important thing first.

✓ I can prioritize the most important things first.

“thing”应为复数形式“things”，因为通常有多个重要事项需要优先处理。

× They also help me to do everything.

✓ They also help me get everything done.

“help me to do everything”表达不自然，改为“help me get everything done”更符合英语习惯。

× Uh, uh, in my opinion, many people may think that they will, uh, reduce the range of time they can use, also lose the freedom of control.

✓ Uh, uh, in my opinion, many people may think that making lists will reduce the amount of time they can use and also make them lose the freedom of control.

句子缺少主语“making lists”，且连接词使用不当，应使用“and”连接两个并列分句。

× Everything in my field are in my field be monitored by time, so.

✓ Everything in my field is monitored by time, so.

句子重复“in my field”，且“are”应改为单数“is”，句子末尾不完整，应去掉多余部分。

× But for me, I prefer make this on paper.

✓ But for me, I prefer to make this on paper.

“prefer”后应接不定式“to make”，缺少“to”导致语法错误。

× If I make this on form, I would not control myself to scroll through my phone and it will waste my time.

✓ If I make this on my phone, I would not be able to control myself from scrolling through my phone and it will waste my time.

“on form”应为“on my phone”，且“control myself to scroll”表达错误，应为“control myself from scrolling”。

× If I just write something down on the paper, I can see more clearly and without a disruptor.

✓ If I just write something down on paper, I can see more clearly and without distractions.

“on the paper”改为“on paper”更自然，“without a disruptor”应改为“without distractions”，因为“disruptor”意思不符。