List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly long and could be more natural by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy such as 'in addition to prevent' which can be simplified. Try to use more varied vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list to make sure I buy everything I need. This helps me avoid impulse purchases and stick to my budget, which is very important to me.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'make A to do list' and 'I gained a sense'. Try to use correct articles and verb tenses. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list to stay productive throughout the day. Once I complete all the tasks, I feel a great sense of accomplishment, which motivates me to keep going.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and using more natural expressions. For example, 'fixing to a to-do list' is awkward; instead, say 'sticking to a to-do list'. Also, try to expand your answer with linking words and more specific reasons.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to be flexible. They like to decide what to do based on their mood rather than sticking to a fixed to-do list.

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks a clear topic sentence and has some grammatical issues. For example, 'Prefer using my phone' should be 'I prefer using my phone'. Also, avoid repeating 'waste' and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's always with me. This makes it easy to add or delete tasks, which is more convenient than using paper, saving both time and resources.

× I always make a list when I shop to ensure that I get everything I need in addition to prevent impulse buying and things are within my budget.

✓ I always make a list when I shop to ensure that I get everything I need, to prevent impulse buying, and to keep things within my budget.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'in addition to' followed by a verb without 'to' and lacks parallel structure. When listing multiple purposes, each should be introduced with 'to' plus the base verb to maintain parallelism and clarity.

× I always make A to do list to ensure that I'm productive that day and after I've completed all the tasks on the To Do List, I gained a sense of accomplishment.

✓ I always make a to-do list to ensure that I'm productive that day, and after I've completed all the tasks on the to-do list, I gain a sense of accomplishment.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' and 'to do list' should be hyphenated as 'to-do list'. Also, 'gained' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'gain' to match the habitual action. Capitalisation of 'To Do List' is inconsistent and should be lowercase unless at the start of a sentence.

× As far as I know, some people like to be flexible. They like to do tasks according to their emotions and their own will instead of fixing to A to do list.

✓ As far as I know, some people like to be flexible. They like to do tasks based on their emotions and their own will instead of sticking to a to-do list.

The phrase 'fixing to A to do list' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'sticking to a to-do list'. Also, 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list' with lowercase 'a' and hyphenated 'to-do'.

× Prefer using my phone because my phone is always with me and it would be more convenient to delete some task or to add some tasks to it instead of using a paper. It would be a waste of time and waste of resources.

✓ I prefer using my phone because it is always with me, and it is more convenient to delete or add tasks on it instead of using paper. Using paper would be a waste of time and resources.

The original sentence lacks a subject at the beginning ('Prefer using my phone'). Also, 'some task' should be plural 'some tasks' or simply 'tasks'. 'Using a paper' is incorrect; 'using paper' is the correct expression. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.