List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. For instance, instead of repeating 'I make a list', you could use synonyms or phrases like 'I prepare a shopping list'. Also, use linking words such as 'therefore' or 'as a result' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I usually prepare a shopping list before I go out because it helps me stay organized. Therefore, I can shop more efficiently and avoid purchasing unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer is detailed and well-structured with good use of examples. To improve further, try to use more linking words like 'in addition' or 'moreover' to connect your ideas and avoid repeating similar phrases such as 'I can'.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and manage my time efficiently. Moreover, by preparing a list each morning, I can focus clearly on the tasks I need to complete during the day, which saves time and reduces stress. This method also allows me to prioritize my work effectively.

提案: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. To improve, try to form a complete sentence that directly answers the question. Use linking words and provide a reason with an example to support your opinion.

例: I believe some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous. For example, they enjoy making decisions on the spot rather than planning everything in advance.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on correct sentence structure and use linking words like 'because' and 'for instance' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is very convenient and always with me. For instance, I can quickly add or check items anytime during the day, and my phone is the first thing I grab every morning when I wake up.

× I do believe that these people who don't like making this is someone who likes spontaneous.

✓ I do believe that people who don't like making lists are those who prefer to be spontaneous.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error (ID 26). It combines clauses incorrectly and uses 'this is someone who likes spontaneous' which is ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the subject and predicate properly, and uses 'prefer to be spontaneous' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's very convenient always with me.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's very convenient and always with me.

The original sentence lacks a conjunction between 'convenient' and 'always with me', causing a grammatical error related to preposition and conjunction usage (ID 11). Adding 'and' connects the ideas properly, improving sentence flow and clarity.

× For example, I can quickly add or check items anytime your day, and my phone is the first thing that I grab every morning I wake up.

✓ For example, I can quickly add or check items anytime during my day, and my phone is the first thing that I grab every morning when I wake up.

The original sentence misuses the pronoun 'your' instead of 'my' and omits the preposition 'during' before 'my day', causing errors in pronoun and preposition usage (ID 11 and 12). Also, 'every morning I wake up' is corrected to 'every morning when I wake up' for clarity and grammatical correctness.