List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some language errors and awkward phrasing such as 'having a lease' instead of 'having a list' and 'it comes all under my selected budget' which affects clarity. Also, avoid redundancy like 'So yes, I make list while I do.' Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, I usually make a list before shopping because it helps me stay organised and avoid forgetting important items. For instance, when I buy groceries, the list saves me time and prevents me from purchasing unnecessary things. Moreover, it helps me stick to my budget effectively.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and relevant with good use of examples. However, avoid starting sentences with 'And' and try to use more varied linking words to improve coherence. Also, consider using more precise vocabulary like 'enhances' instead of 'improves' and avoid minor grammatical slips.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work as it helps me stay organised and focused. For example, by prioritising tasks, I can manage my time efficiently and avoid missing important duties. Consequently, making a list enhances my productivity and saves time.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well with relevant reasons and examples. However, there are some grammatical errors such as 'more spontaneous approach' (should be 'a more spontaneous approach') and 'simplify forget' (should be 'simply forget'). Also, try to use linking words like 'furthermore' or 'moreover' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find them restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous approach to managing tasks. For instance, they may feel that lists limit their creativity or add unnecessary pressure to complete everything. Moreover, some individuals simply forget to update their lists, which makes the process ineffective.

提案: Your answer has good points but contains unclear phrases like 'helps save people running' and incomplete sentence at the end. Also, avoid starting sentences with 'Firstly', 'Secondly' without proper punctuation and try to use more natural linking words. Make sure your sentences are complete and clear.

例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it is environmentally friendly and convenient. I can access my list anytime and anywhere, and easily share it with others through apps. Additionally, note-taking apps help me organise and update my lists efficiently, which makes shopping easier.

× For example, when I shop for groceries, having a lease saves me time and prevents me from buying unnecessary things.

✓ For example, when I shop for groceries, having a list saves me time and prevents me from buying unnecessary things.

The word 'lease' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'list'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but since it affects meaning, it is corrected to 'list'.

× And it comes all under my selected budget.

✓ And it all comes under my selected budget.

The adverb 'all' should come before the verb 'comes' to maintain correct word order in English sentences.

× So yes, I make list while I do.

✓ So yes, I make a list when I do.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, 'while I do' is awkward; 'when I do' is more appropriate to express the intended meaning.

× Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and prefer more spontaneous approach to managing their task.

✓ Some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and prefer a more spontaneous approach to managing their tasks.

The phrase 'more spontaneous approach' needs the article 'a' before it. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match the general meaning.

× Additionally, some individuals may simplify forget to update their list, making the process ineffective.

✓ Additionally, some individuals may simply forget to update their list, making the process ineffective.

The word 'simplify' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'simply'. This is a word choice error affecting grammar.

× I usually prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because firstly, it helps save people running, which is environmentally friendly.

✓ I usually prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because, firstly, it helps save paper, which is environmentally friendly.

The phrase 'save people running' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'save paper'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× Secondly, I can access my list anytime and anywhere and I can easily share them with others through various apps.

✓ Secondly, I can access my list anytime and anywhere and I can easily share it with others through various apps.

The pronoun 'them' is plural but refers to 'my list', which is singular. The correct pronoun is 'it'.

× Finally, using a note taking app allows me to organize and update my list efficiently, which makes me shopping or.

✓ Finally, using a note-taking app allows me to organize and update my list efficiently, which makes my shopping easier.

The phrase 'makes me shopping or' is ungrammatical and unclear. It is corrected to 'makes my shopping easier' to convey the intended meaning clearly.