List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「I can't remember many things」は「I can't remember many items」や「I tend to forget many things」の方が自然です。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使うとより効果的です。

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget many items, so writing a list helps me remember everything I need.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的に誤りがあります。「to play a role in order」は意味が伝わりにくいので、「to keep things organized」などの表現を使うと良いでしょう。また、質問の後半「Does it work?」に対しても明確に答える必要があります。

例: Yes, I always have small tasks, so I make a work list to keep things organized. It works well because it helps me complete my tasks efficiently.

提案: 回答が質問に対して直接的でなく、文法や語彙の誤りも多いです。「listen to people take note on their smartphone」は意味が不明瞭です。理由を明確にし、比較をするときは接続詞を使いましょう。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it time-consuming, and they prefer using their smartphones since it's more efficient and convenient than paper.

提案: 質問に対して「Yes」だけで答えるのは不十分です。どちらを好むかを明確に述べ、その理由を詳しく説明しましょう。また、「efficiency」は副詞形「efficiently」に直す必要があります。

例: I prefer to make lists on my smartphone because I always have it with me, so I can create lists quickly and efficiently.

× Yes, because when I buy something I can't remember many things, so I write a list to remember it.

✓ Yes, because when I buy something I can't remember many things, so I write lists to remember them.

The word 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match 'many things' which is plural. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to multiple things.

× Yes, I always have small tasks, so to play a role in order I make a work list.

✓ Yes, I always have small tasks, so to keep things in order I make a work list.

The phrase 'play a role in order' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'keep things in order' to indicate organizing tasks.

× The reason why people don't like making list is listen to people take note on their smartphone.

✓ The reason why people don't like making lists is that they listen to people taking notes on their smartphones.

'list' should be plural 'lists' to match 'people'. Also, the sentence structure is corrected to include 'that' and proper verb forms.

× It is more efficiency and useful than paper.

✓ It is more efficient and useful than paper.

'efficiency' is a noun but should be the adjective 'efficient' to modify 'it'. 'more' is used with adjectives, not nouns.

× Yes, because I always use my smartphone so.

✓ Yes, because I always use my smartphone.

The word 'so' at the end is unnecessary and makes the sentence incomplete.

× I can make a list quickly and efficiency.

✓ I can make a list quickly and efficiently.

'efficiency' is a noun; the adverb form 'efficiently' should be used to modify the verb 'make'.