List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但句子结构较为混乱，缺少连贯的连接词，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词如“so”或“because”来使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me find what I need quickly and avoid wasting time and money on unnecessary items.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“feel comfortable confronted”不合适。建议使用更准确的表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I make a list when I work because it shows me what tasks to complete at each stage and clarifies my goals. Without a clear list, I would feel confused and uncomfortable.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，如“maintenance”和“the least limiting”用法错误。建议使用更贴切的词汇，并注意句子结构和连贯性。

例: Although making lists has many benefits, some people don't like it because they feel it limits their freedom. They prefer to work more flexibly and spontaneously.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议合并句子，使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: I prefer to make my list on my phone because it is more convenient. I can check it anytime and anywhere, while making a list on paper requires pen and paper, which is less convenient.

× with a list I can find what I need then when I go to the shop and I can avoid wasting the time and money on something what I don't need actually.

✓ with a list I can find what I need when I go to the shop and I can avoid wasting time and money on things I don't need actually.

这里“the time and money”中的“the”不必要，且“something what I don't need”结构错误，应改为“things I don't need”，因为指的是复数的东西。

× something what I don't need actually.

✓ things I don't need actually.

“something what I don't need”中“what”用法错误，应直接用“things I don't need”表示复数的东西。

× I make a list while I work with a list.

✓ I make a list while I work.

“while I work with a list”中“with a list”重复且不自然，应去掉。

× A list can tell you what I should do at every stage and it also can make my goal more clear.

✓ A list can tell me what I should do at every stage and it can also make my goal clearer.

“tell you what I should do”中主语和宾语不一致，应改为“tell me what I should do”；“more clear”应改为比较级“clearer”。

× it also can make my goal more clear.

✓ it can also make my goal clearer.

“more clear”应使用比较级“clearer”，且“also”位置调整更自然。

× Without a clear list, I think I will feel comfortable confronted when doing something.

✓ Without a clear list, I think I will feel uncomfortable and confronted when doing something.

“feel comfortable confronted”结构不正确，应为“feel uncomfortable and confronted”，表达不舒服和被挑战的感觉。

× some people still don't favor of making this because the least limiting the freedom when you do something.

✓ some people still don't favor making this because it limits their freedom when they do something.

“don't favor of making”中“of”多余，应去掉；“the least limiting the freedom”结构错误，应改为“it limits their freedom”。

× the least limiting the freedom when you do something.

✓ it limits their freedom when they do something.

“you”应改为泛指的“they”，保持主语一致。

× Some people prefer to work more flexible and spontaneous.

✓ Some people prefer to work more flexibly and spontaneously.

“flexible”和“spontaneous”是形容词，修饰动词应使用副词形式“flexibly”和“spontaneously”。

× But make my list on the paper.

✓ But if I make my list on paper,

句子缺少主语和完整结构，应补充“if I”并去掉“the”使表达更自然。

× I can watch my list at any time, anywhere, everywhere.

✓ I can check my list at any time, anywhere.

“watch my list”用词不当，应改为“check my list”；“anywhere, everywhere”重复，保留“anywhere”即可。

× But make my list on the paper.

✓ But make my list on paper.

“on the paper”中“the”不必要，通常表达为“on paper”。