List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be made more natural and clear. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, say "I make a list when I shop because it helps me avoid impulsive purchases and manage my budget better."

例: I make a list when I shop because it helps me avoid buying things I don't need and keeps my budget under control.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. For example, "Yes, I make lists for my work because they save time and increase my productivity."

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me stay organised and complete tasks more efficiently.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Some people dislike making lists because they feel it restricts their creativity, and they believe spontaneous decisions can lead to better options."

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it limits their freedom, and they prefer to make spontaneous choices which they think are better.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant phrases. Focus on directly answering the question with clear reasons. For example, "I prefer making lists on my phone because it is convenient and easy to access anytime."

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is convenient and I can update it anytime without losing it.

× Yes, I do make a list because it restricts me from impulsive buying or shopping things that I don't have use in the future and it makes benefit in my budgeting also.

✓ Yes, I do make a list because it restricts me from impulsive buying or shopping for things that I won't use in the future and it benefits my budgeting as well.

The phrase 'shopping things that I don't have use' is incorrect; it should be 'shopping for things that I won't use' to correctly use the verb 'shop' with the preposition 'for' and the future tense 'won't use'. Also, 'makes benefit in my budgeting' is incorrect; it should be 'benefits my budgeting' to use the verb 'benefit' properly.

× Yes, perceive in making list is less consuming time and makes me more productivity, makes my work more productivity and it's usually for those who can't have a spontaneous things to buy.

✓ Yes, I perceive that making a list consumes less time and makes me more productive; it makes my work more productive and it's usually for those who can't handle spontaneous things to buy.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and word forms. 'Perceive in making list' should be 'I perceive that making a list'. 'Less consuming time' should be 'consumes less time'. 'Makes me more productivity' should be 'makes me more productive'. Also, 'can't have a spontaneous things' is incorrect; it should be 'can't handle spontaneous things'.

× Some people think that it restricts their mind and their thoughts and they are thing that spontaneous things are better with uh time and it's give the better options to them.

✓ Some people think that it restricts their minds and their thoughts and that spontaneous things are better with time and it gives them better options.

The sentence has pronoun agreement errors: 'their mind' should be 'their minds' to agree in number. 'They are thing that' is incorrect and should be 'that'. 'It's give' should be 'it gives' to agree with the singular subject.

× Uh, yes, of course I do make a list in my phone because it's so convenient and so lie lying I cherish because who's invented a phone because it's makes our life so easy and perseverance.

✓ Uh, yes, of course I do make a list on my phone because it's so convenient and I cherish it because whoever invented the phone made our life so easy and persistent.

The preposition 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' when referring to using a phone. The phrase 'so lie lying I cherish' is unclear and corrected to 'and I cherish it'. 'Who's invented a phone' should be 'whoever invented the phone'. 'It's makes' should be 'made'. 'Perseverance' is a noun and does not fit here; 'persistent' or 'easy and persistent' is more appropriate.