List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words to make it more coherent. Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I always make a list before shopping because I tend to forget what I need once I enter the supermarket. Therefore, I prepare a list of items required for the week, which helps me shop quickly and avoid buying unnecessary products.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but needs better sentence structure and linking words to improve clarity. Avoid repetition and use more precise vocabulary. For example, use 'I prepare a to-do list every morning and follow it strictly, which helps me complete my tasks efficiently.'

例: Yes, I prepare a to-do list every morning and follow it strictly throughout the day. This method helps me complete all my tasks efficiently and gradually improve my productivity.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use linking words like 'because' and 'however' properly, and avoid informal phrases like 'Want to be noted?'. Also, provide more specific reasons and opinions.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to work spontaneously without planning. However, in my opinion, making a list is important as it helps organise tasks and improves efficiency.

提案: Your answer conveys your preference but can be improved by clearer sentence structure and linking words. Avoid awkward phrases like 'my mind will be collapsed'. Use expressions like 'I find it easier to remember when I write on paper because...'.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because writing helps me remember better. When I use my phone, I often get distracted by other apps, so paper lists help me stay focused.

× Yes, I do take a list because when I get into supermarket I just forgot.

✓ Yes, I do take a list because when I get into the supermarket I just forget.

The verb 'forgot' is in the past tense, but the context requires present tense 'forget' to match 'when I get into the supermarket'. Also, 'supermarket' needs the definite article 'the'.

× when I get into supermarket I just forgot.

✓ when I get into the supermarket I just forget.

The noun 'supermarket' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× So before going to supermarket I take a list what are the need I want for this week and I went to supermarket and get it soon.

✓ So before going to the supermarket I take a list of what I need for this week and I go to the supermarket and get it soon.

The phrase 'what are the need I want' is incorrect; it should be 'what I need'. Also, 'went' is past tense but the sentence context is present habitual action, so 'go' is correct. 'Supermarket' needs the definite article 'the'.

× and I went to supermarket and get it soon.

✓ and I go to the supermarket and get it soon.

The verb 'went' is past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'go' is appropriate. Also, 'supermarket' requires the definite article 'the'.

× and I went to supermarket and get it soon.

✓ and I go to the supermarket and get it soon.

The noun 'supermarket' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place.

× It makes so easy to purchase and I don't buy extra products.

✓ It makes purchasing so easy and I don't buy extra products.

The phrase 'makes so easy to purchase' is incorrect; 'makes purchasing so easy' is the correct form using the gerund as the object of 'makes'.

× Every morning I write down my work and I prepare one list and I follow the list at the end of the day without any bending I complete my every work.

✓ Every morning I write down my work and prepare a list, and I follow the list; at the end of the day, without any bending, I complete all my work.

The phrase 'without any bending' is unclear and likely a misuse; possibly 'without any bending' should be 'without any bending of rules' or 'without any deviation'. Also, 'my every work' is incorrect; 'all my work' is appropriate. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× This makes so easy and it's make me to improve myself day by day.

✓ This makes things so easy and it helps me to improve myself day by day.

'It's make me' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps me'. Also, 'makes so easy' needs an object like 'things' to be grammatically correct.

× And it is a good idea I think so.

✓ And I think it is a good idea.

The phrase 'I think so' is misplaced; the correct structure is 'I think it is a good idea'.

× Because they don't have any plan, so they randomly doing their work without any plan.

✓ Because they don't have any plan, they do their work randomly without any plan.

The phrase 'they randomly doing' is incorrect; it should be 'they do their work randomly'. Also, 'so' is redundant after 'because'.

× In case of this, they shouldn't take any list while they're doing the work.

✓ In this case, they shouldn't make any list while they're doing the work.

The phrase 'In case of this' is incorrect; 'In this case' is correct. Also, 'take any list' is incorrect; 'make any list' or 'use any list' is appropriate.

× But that is a too bad idea in my point of view.

✓ But that is too bad an idea in my point of view.

The phrase 'a too bad idea' is incorrect; the correct form is 'too bad an idea'.

× You should want to take a list at each and every work.

✓ You should make a list for each and every task.

'You should want to take a list' is incorrect; 'You should make a list' is appropriate. Also, 'each and every work' is awkward; 'each and every task' is better.

× I used to write on a paper because while I'm writing it gives more memory to my mind and I can remember at any time.

✓ I usually write on paper because while I'm writing it gives more memory to my mind and I can remember at any time.

'Used to' implies a past habit no longer done; context suggests a current habit, so 'usually' is better. Also, 'on a paper' should be 'on paper'.

× I used to write on a paper because while I'm writing it gives more memory to my mind and I can remember at any time.

✓ I usually write on paper because while I'm writing it gives more memory to my mind and I can remember at any time.

The preposition 'on a paper' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on paper'.

× If I noted in my phone, I will when I'm seeing.

✓ If I note it in my phone, I will remember when I see it.

'Noted' is past tense; 'note' is correct here. 'I will when I'm seeing' is incomplete and unclear; corrected to 'I will remember when I see it'.

× When I'm taking phone to see a list I just seeing some other app, my mind will be collapsed.

✓ When I take my phone to see the list, I just end up seeing some other app, and my mind gets distracted.

'I'm taking phone' should be 'I take my phone'. 'Just seeing some other app' is incorrect; 'end up seeing some other app' is better. 'My mind will be collapsed' is incorrect; 'my mind gets distracted' is appropriate.

× So I prefer to take a list in paper only.

✓ So I prefer to make a list on paper only.

The phrase 'take a list in paper' is incorrect; 'make a list on paper' is the correct expression.