List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在较多重复和犹豫词汇，影响流畅性。建议减少重复，使用更自然的表达，并且注意时态一致。

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember everything I need to buy. This way, my shopping is more organized and efficient.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议使用正确的时态和更简洁的句子结构，避免重复。

例: I don't usually make a work list, but I plan to start because it will help me organize my tasks better and work more smoothly.

提案: 回答逻辑不清，表达混乱且有语法错误。建议理清思路，使用连贯的句子表达原因，并避免负面评价。

例: Some people may dislike making lists because they find it time-consuming or prefer to work spontaneously, but this can sometimes lead to disorganization.

提案: 回答不完整且有重复，表达不清晰。建议完整表达观点，避免重复，并使用连贯的句子。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always carry it with me, so I won't forget my list like I might if it's on paper.

× I used to make a list when I go to shop because I have to have a schedule that, umm, that I have to buy because if I don't do that, I will forget what I, I want to buy.

✓ I used to make a list when I went shopping because I have to have a schedule of what I have to buy, because if I don't do that, I will forget what I want to buy.

这里的时间状语是过去时态（used to），所以后面的动作也应该用过去时态，'go to shop' 应改为 'went shopping'。另外，'go to shop' 应改为动名词形式 'shopping'，更符合英语习惯。

× And because, uh, I think if you have the list, it will make your shopping become more convenient and have a complete.

✓ And because, uh, I think if you have a list, it will make your shopping more convenient and complete.

这里 'the list' 应改为不定冠词 'a list'，因为泛指一张购物清单。'have a complete' 结构不完整，应改为 'more convenient and complete'，使句子通顺。

× I don't used to make a list of my work, but I have planned to because I think, uh, if I have a list, I can more completely know what I have to do and my work will be more, more, uh, fluent.

✓ I don't usually make a list of my work, but I have planned to because I think, uh, if I have a list, I can better know what I have to do and my work will be more fluent.

'don't used to' 是错误用法，应改为 'don't usually' 表示习惯。'can more completely know' 结构不自然，应改为 'can better know'。

× Because I think they don't have they, they are lazy and have no fault of their plan.

✓ Because I think they don't have a plan, they are lazy and have no sense of responsibility for their plan.

原句中 'they don't have they' 是重复且错误的代词使用，应改为 'they don't have a plan'。另外，'have no fault of their plan' 表达不清，应改为 'have no sense of responsibility for their plan'。

× So they don't do not do the list.

✓ So they do not make a list.

'don't do not do' 是双重否定，应改为 'do not make'。'do the list' 也不符合习惯，应改为 'make a list'。

× So as a result they always don't have a schedule and always be very in a panic.

✓ So as a result, they never have a schedule and are always very panicked.

'always don't have' 语序错误，应改为 'never have'。'always be very in a panic' 结构错误，'in a panic' 是固定搭配，前面应加 'are'，且 'very in a panic' 不自然，改为 'very panicked'。

× I prepared making a list on my phone because in in this digital digi generation, you have to bring my phone on wherever I am.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because in this digital generation, I have to bring my phone wherever I go.

'I prepared making' 应改为 'I prefer making' 表达偏好。'you have to bring my phone' 中人称不一致，应改为 'I have to bring my phone'。'on wherever I am' 介词使用错误，应改为 'wherever I go'。

× I think maybe on the paper you will forget forget it and and I think phone was more.

✓ I think maybe on paper you will forget it, and I think the phone is better.

'on the paper' 应改为 'on paper'，更符合习惯用法。'forget forget it and and' 有重复，应删去重复词。'phone was more' 结构不完整，应改为 'the phone is better'。