List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repeating words and make your sentences more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide a clearer explanation.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me avoid buying unnecessary items, which saves my money.

提案: Avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain how making a list benefits your work more clearly.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me organize my tasks efficiently, so I can finish them faster and with less stress.

提案: Work on grammar, especially subject-verb agreement, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your reasons logically and provide clearer explanations.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it boring or time-consuming. Additionally, they may not know how to create an effective list, so they need guidance from others.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because handwriting helps me remember better, and it feels more natural than typing on my phone.

× Yes, I do make a list when I go shopping because I think if I went shopping without without making a list, it will make me buy more than the things that I need so it will be a waste for my money.

✓ Yes, I do make a list when I go shopping because I think if I go shopping without making a list, it will make me buy more than the things that I need so it will be a waste of my money.

The sentence incorrectly mixes past tense 'went' with present tense context. Since the sentence talks about a general habit, the correct tense is present simple 'go'. Also, 'waste for my money' should be 'waste of my money' because 'waste of' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Yes, I do make a list when I go shopping because I think if I went shopping without without making a list, it will make me buy more than the things that I need so it will be a waste for my money.

✓ Yes, I do make a list when I go shopping because I think if I go shopping without making a list, it will make me buy more than the things that I need so it will be a waste of my money.

The phrase 'waste for my money' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'of' in the phrase 'waste of my money'. This is a common collocation in English.

× Yes, I do do a list for my work because when I do a list for my work it helps me finish my work faster and easier with no other thing.

✓ Yes, I do make a list for my work because when I make a list for my work it helps me finish my work faster and more easily with nothing else to do.

The verb 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'make a list'. Also, 'easier' should be 'more easily' because it modifies the verb 'finish'. The phrase 'with no other thing' is awkward; 'with nothing else to do' or 'without other tasks' is better.

× I think some people does not like making a list 'cause they think that it's boring or waste for their time or just not beneficial.

✓ I think some people do not like making a list because they think that it's boring or a waste of their time or just not beneficial.

The subject 'some people' is plural, so the verb should be 'do not' instead of 'does not'. Also, 'waste for their time' should be 'a waste of their time' for correct preposition and article usage.

× And I think because they do not know how to make a list so they need help from other people that does know how to make a list.

✓ And I think because they do not know how to make a list, they need help from other people who do know how to make a list.

The relative pronoun 'that' is less appropriate here; 'who' is used for people. Also, 'does know' should be 'do know' to agree with the plural subject 'people'. The sentence also needs a comma before 'they need help' to separate clauses.

× I prefer making a list on paper because I prefer you handwriting instead of using my phone to write and making a list on paper is easier to remember.

✓ I prefer making a list on paper because I prefer your handwriting instead of using my phone to write, and making a list on paper is easier to remember.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be 'your' to show possession. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate the two independent clauses.