List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "significant and important" and incomplete phrases such as "to not forget and." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized and avoid buying unnecessary items. This way, I don't forget anything important and can shop more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is clear and structured, but repeating "always" and "every time" is redundant. Try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence. Also, adding a specific example would enrich your response.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work, and it helps me prioritize urgent tasks while postponing less critical ones. For instance, last week, my list helped me meet all deadlines efficiently.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by correcting grammar (e.g., "people who want"), using linking words, and providing more specific reasons or examples to support your points.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it limits their freedom. They prefer to work spontaneously and creatively, which allows them to enjoy their tasks more fully.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good use of linking words like "furthermore." To improve, avoid minor awkward phrasing such as "some things that I want to" and try to use more precise vocabulary.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and always accessible. Additionally, I can quickly add or remove items, which makes managing my tasks easier.

× Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to stay organized and prevents me from wandering around the aisle and purchase unnecessary items.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me to stay organized and prevents me from wandering around the aisle and purchasing unnecessary items.

After the verb 'prevents', the following verb should be in the '-ing' form to maintain correct verb pattern. 'Prevents me from purchase' is incorrect; it should be 'prevents me from purchasing'. This is because 'prevent from' is followed by a gerund (verb + -ing).

× Having a list is significant and important for me to not forget and.

✓ Having a list is significant and important for me so that I do not forget anything.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and'. The phrase 'to not forget and' is incorrect and unclear. The corrected sentence completes the thought by explaining the purpose of having a list, using 'so that I do not forget anything'. This improves clarity and sentence structure.

× Some people don't want to make a list because it restricts them to do what they want.

✓ Some people don't want to make a list because it restricts them from doing what they want.

The phrase 'restricts them to do' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'restricts them from doing'. Also, 'restricts' is correct as the subject 'it' is singular. The verb after 'restricts' should be a gerund ('doing') rather than an infinitive ('to do').

× There are a lot of people who wants to do task spontaneously, be creative and have the freedom to do the things that they love.

✓ There are a lot of people who want to do tasks spontaneously, be creative, and have the freedom to do the things that they love.

The relative pronoun 'who' refers to 'people', which is plural, so the verb should be 'want' not 'wants'. Also, 'do task' should be pluralized to 'do tasks' to match the plural subject and for natural expression.

× I always prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on a piece of paper because it's convenient and I can access my phone easily.

✓ I always prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on a piece of paper because it's convenient and I can access it easily.

Repeating 'my phone' is redundant. Using 'it' as a pronoun to refer back to 'my phone' is more natural and avoids repetition. This is an issue of pronoun use and sentence conciseness.

× Furthermore, having a list on my phone, I can easily add or delete some things that I want to.

✓ Furthermore, having a list on my phone allows me to easily add or delete some things that I want to.

The original sentence is a comma splice and lacks a proper main verb connecting the clauses. Starting with 'Having a list on my phone' requires a main verb like 'allows' to complete the sentence. Also, 'that I want to' is incomplete; it implies 'that I want to add or delete'. The correction clarifies the meaning and fixes sentence structure.