List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。質問に直接答え、簡潔で明確な文章を心がけましょう。例えば、買い物の際にリストを作るかどうかをはっきり述べ、その理由や具体例を付け加えると良いです。

例: No, I usually don't make a list when I go shopping. I prefer to browse around and see what catches my eye because I enjoy window shopping.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に対して直接的に答え、リストを使う理由や効果について具体的に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I make a list for my work. It helps me stay organized and avoid mistakes, so I can complete my tasks more efficiently.

提案: 意味は伝わりますが、繰り返しや文法の誤りがあり、表現が不自然です。理由を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。

例: In my opinion, some people don't like making lists because they feel controlled by them, and they want to feel free and spontaneous.

提案: 回答が途中で終わっており、意味が不明瞭です。質問に対して明確に答え、状況に応じた理由を具体的に説明しましょう。

例: It depends on the situation. For short-term tasks, I prefer making a list on paper because it's quick. But for long-term plans, I use my phone because it's easier to update.

× Usually I didn't didn't I didn't edit it.

✓ Usually I didn't edit it.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'didn't didn't' which is incorrect. The past tense auxiliary 'didn't' should be used only once to negate the verb 'edit'. Repeating it is a redundancy and grammatical error.

× I always a window shopping when I was go shopping.

✓ I always do window shopping when I go shopping.

The phrase 'a window shopping' is incorrect because 'window shopping' is a verb phrase and should not have an article 'a'. Also, 'was go' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go' for habitual actions in the past or present. The verb 'do' is added to make the sentence grammatically correct.

× I love watching and I wanna find like.

✓ I love watching and I want to find things I like.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I wanna find like' is not a complete thought. Adding 'things I like' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'wanna' is informal; 'want to' is more appropriate in formal speech.

× Yes, I do differently.

✓ Yes, I do it differently.

The verb 'do' requires an object here to specify what is done differently. Adding 'it' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I like using a manual because I when I was 8 I don't have to worry about mistaking of my job.

✓ I like using a manual because when I was 8 I didn't have to worry about making mistakes in my job.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Don't have' should be 'didn't have' to match the past time 'when I was 8'. Also, 'mistaking of my job' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'making mistakes in my job'.

× In my opinion on some people feel feel you feel that you control you are controlled by using a list, so they wanna be free.

✓ In my opinion, some people feel that they are controlled by using a list, so they want to be free.

The sentence has repeated words and incorrect pronoun usage. 'You feel that you control' is confusing; it should be 'they feel that they are controlled'. Also, 'wanna' should be 'want to' for clarity.

× It depends on the situation. When I do in short period I prefer the paper but long. If I do it in long time I would be I.

✓ It depends on the situation. When I do it for a short period, I prefer paper, but for a long time, I would use my phone.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'When I do in short period' lacks an object and article. 'I would be I' is incomplete. The correction adds necessary articles and clarifies the meaning.