List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'make a note' and 'make a list', you can say 'I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget things.'

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I tend to forget things. This helps me remember everything I need to buy and saves time.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'make list for my work'.

例: Definitely, I make lists for my work because they save me time and help me stay organized. For instance, having a clear list allows me to prioritize tasks effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more fluent by correcting grammar and using linking words. For example, say 'Some people dislike making lists because they find them boring and believe it wastes time.'

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find the process boring and believe it wastes their time.

提案: Your answer is good but slightly off-topic with 'ebooks'. Focus on the question about lists and improve coherence by linking ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is convenient and I can access them anywhere easily.

× I generally make a note that what I want to shop because I had a problem of forgetting things.

✓ I generally make a note of what I want to shop because I have a problem with forgetting things.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'had' (past tense) when referring to a current problem, so it should be 'have' (present tense). Also, the phrase 'make a note that what I want to shop' is incorrect; it should be 'make a note of what I want to shop' to use the correct preposition 'of' after 'make a note'.

× So when I noted all the things which I wanted, then I made a list of them.

✓ So when I noted all the things that I wanted, I made a list of them.

The word 'which' is less appropriate here; 'that' is preferred in restrictive clauses. Also, the word 'then' is unnecessary and can be omitted for better sentence flow.

× For example, when I make list for my work, it saves my time and helps me to stay organized.

✓ For example, when I make a list for my work, it saves me time and helps me to stay organized.

The noun 'list' is countable and singular here, so it requires the article 'a'. Also, 'saves my time' is better expressed as 'saves me time' in English.

× Some people don't like preparing lists as they find them boring and they also think that they this is a waste of time.

✓ Some people don't like preparing lists as they find them boring and also think that this is a waste of time.

The phrase 'they this' is incorrect; 'they' should be removed to avoid redundancy and grammatical error.