List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan alami, hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu, serta gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke poin. Misalnya, jelaskan alasan membuat daftar belanja dengan kalimat yang terstruktur dan mudah dipahami.

例: I always make a shopping list to avoid buying things I don't need. It helps me stay organized and save money.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Hindari pengulangan kata dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih ringkas namun informatif.

例: Since junior high school, I have made a daily to-do list. It helps me organize tasks for each day, and even now at university, it makes my day more effective.

提案: Perbaiki penggunaan kosakata dan tata bahasa agar lebih jelas dan alami. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Jelaskan alasan dengan lebih spesifik dan terstruktur.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel overwhelmed by the number of tasks. Making a list can remind them of too many things to do, which makes them want to avoid it.

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan alasan preferensi dengan jelas. Hindari penggunaan kata yang tidak baku dan buat kalimat lebih singkat dan efektif.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because if I use my phone, I get distracted by social media and often forget to check the list.

× I always make a list before I do shopping so I can I will not like over buy something that I don't need.

✓ I always make a list before I go shopping so I will not overbuy something that I don't need.

The phrase 'do shopping' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go shopping' because 'shopping' is a noun here and 'go' is the appropriate verb. Also, 'like over buy' is incorrect; it should be 'overbuy' as a single verb meaning to buy too much.

× And also just like I'm in the first two students so I just like have a pack of lowens from my parents.

✓ Also, since I am one of the first two students, I have a pack of lozenges from my parents.

The original sentence is unclear and uses 'I'm in the first two students' incorrectly. The correct expression is 'I am one of the first two students.' Also, 'just like have' is incorrect; it should be 'I have.' 'Lowens' seems to be a misspelling of 'lozenges.'

× So yeah, I always do the least.

✓ So yeah, I always do the list.

The word 'least' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'list.' This is a spelling error rather than a grammar issue, but it affects meaning.

× I mean if it is student bro.

✓ I mean if it is a student, bro.

The sentence lacks an article before 'student.' Adding 'a' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'bro' is informal but acceptable in spoken language.

× since I was in junior high school, I always make A to do list every single day.

✓ Since I was in junior high school, I have always made a to-do list every single day.

The action started in the past and continues to the present, so present perfect tense 'have always made' is appropriate. Also, 'A to do list' should be 'a to-do list' with hyphens and lowercase 'a.'

× Like, uh, for Sunday I should do something and then Monday I should do this, this and that.

✓ For Sunday, I should do something, and then on Monday, I should do this, this, and that.

Prepositions 'for' and 'on' are needed to specify days. Also, commas improve clarity.

× And then until right now I'm in the university university, umm, I always do it, at least until now.

✓ And until now, I am at university, and I always do it.

The phrase 'until right now I'm in the university university' is redundant and awkward. 'I am at university' is the correct expression. Also, 'always do it' fits present tense.

× So it's make like my day more effective.

✓ So it makes my day more effective.

The subject 'it' requires the verb 'makes' in third person singular present tense. 'Make like' is incorrect; 'makes' is sufficient.

× Maybe they just like avoid any tasks of their lives since like they feel overstimulated of lot of tech they should do and then they just like try to avoid it 'cause maybe when you make a list you will feel so overstimulated of any attacks that you do.

✓ Maybe they just avoid tasks in their lives because they feel overwhelmed by the many tasks they have to do, and they try to avoid it because when you make a list, you might feel overwhelmed by all the tasks you have.

The sentence has multiple pronoun and word choice errors: 'like avoid' should be 'avoid,' 'overstimulated of lot of tech' should be 'overwhelmed by the many tasks,' and 'attacks' should be 'tasks.' Also, 'you will feel' is better as 'you might feel' to express possibility.

× I prefer to make it on the paper since like if I write it in my phone, never do the text 'cause I will open my Instagram or any social media that I have and the next day I will degrade it.

✓ I prefer to make it on paper because if I write it on my phone, I never check the text since I will open Instagram or any social media I have, and the next day I will ignore it.

The phrase 'make it on the paper' should be 'make it on paper' without 'the.' Also, 'write it in my phone' should be 'write it on my phone.' 'Never do the text' is incorrect; it should be 'never check the text.' 'Degrade it' is incorrect; 'ignore it' fits better.