List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons. For example, avoid repeating words like 'when' and use correct verb forms. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list on my phone to ensure I don't forget anything. This helps me stay organized and saves time during my shopping trips.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use correct plural forms and avoid awkward phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence and then explain why making lists helps you. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I use my phone calendar to make lists for my work because I have two jobs. Since I sometimes swap shifts with colleagues, the list helps me avoid confusion and stay organized.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Provide specific reasons with linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel it takes too much time. Additionally, some have better memories and prefer to remember tasks without writing them down.

提案: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Avoid unclear phrases like 'make eye makeup less than paper.' Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and logically.

例: Nowadays, I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient and I always have my phone with me. This way, I am less likely to forget my list compared to using paper.

× Some people don't like to making a list because they think it's too much consuming our time.

✓ Some people don't like making a list because they think it consumes too much of our time.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'making' without 'to'. Also, 'too much consuming our time' is incorrect; it should be 'consumes too much of our time' to correctly express the idea.

× I always make a list on my phone so I did not skip or I did not neglect any things that I want to shop.

✓ I always make a list on my phone so I do not skip or neglect anything that I want to buy.

The word 'things' should be singular 'anything' in this context. Also, 'did not' is past tense but the sentence refers to a habitual action, so present tense 'do not' is appropriate. Additionally, 'want to shop' should be 'want to buy' for clarity.

× These days technology was day a day, so I love to make a list on my phone because it's easy and I I always carry my phone so I did not forget because it may make eye makeup less than paper.

✓ These days technology is day by day, so I love to make a list on my phone because it's easy and I always carry my phone so I do not forget because it may make mistakes less than paper.

The phrase 'was day a day' is incorrect; it should be 'is day by day' to indicate ongoing progress. 'Did not forget' is past tense but the context is present habitual action, so 'do not forget' is correct. 'Make eye makeup less' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; 'make mistakes less' fits the intended meaning better.

× Yes, I always make a list for my work on the phone calendar because I'm doing two job jobs and sometimes I switch something like some jobs with someone so that's why I get confused.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for my work on the phone calendar because I'm doing two jobs and sometimes I switch some jobs with someone, so that's why I get confused.

The word 'job jobs' is redundant; it should be 'jobs'. Also, 'switch something like some jobs with someone' is awkward; 'switch some jobs with someone' is clearer and grammatically correct.