List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但句子结构稍显复杂且有些冗长。建议简化句子，避免重复表达，同时使用更自然的连接词。

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list. I write down the items I need and prioritize them because it's easy to forget things when buying many products.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态和语法，简洁明了地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually don't make a detailed work plan because unexpected events can disrupt it. Instead, I list the main tasks to stay organized and flexible.

提案: 句子结构不够自然，语法错误影响理解。建议使用更准确的表达方式，注意时态和主谓一致，提升语言流畅度。

例: Some people dislike making lists because they want to stay flexible and avoid being disrupted by unexpected events.

提案: 回答中存在语法和用词错误，如'taking write down'和'tile something down'。建议使用正确的短语和词汇，表达更自然流畅。

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's convenient. I can quickly open an app and write things down without carrying a notebook.

× I'm afraid of some small accident may broke my whole schedule.

✓ I'm afraid some small accident may break my whole schedule.

这里的动词应使用原形，因为情态动词'may'后面接动词原形，不能用过去式'broke'。

× which can avoid something unexpected happens that will broke the whole schedule.

✓ which can avoid something unexpected happening that will break the whole schedule.

动词'happens'应改为动名词形式'happening'，因为前面有'avoid'，后面动词应用动名词形式；'broke'应改为原形'break'，因为前面有情态动词'will'。

× Personally I'm more into taking write down something on my phone 'cause this is more convenient.

✓ Personally I'm more into writing down something on my phone 'cause this is more convenient.

'more into'后面应接动名词形式，'taking write down'不符合语法，应改为'writing down'。

× I just need to open some apps and tile something down and no need to bring a book everywhere I go.

✓ I just need to open some apps and title something down and no need to bring a book everywhere I go.

这里'tile'应为'title'，但实际上应为'write'或'jot'，表示记下；另外，'no need to bring'应改为'I don't need to bring'以符合语法。

× Phone is relatively more portable.

✓ The phone is relatively more portable.

名词前缺少冠词'the'，应加上以符合英语习惯。