List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and 'I would say'. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent. For example, clarify your points directly and avoid redundancy, such as 'I make a list when I'm on a budget to avoid overspending.'

例: I usually make a shopping list when I'm on a budget to avoid overspending. However, sometimes I shop spontaneously when I have more money available.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words for coherence. For instance, say 'I usually make a rough schedule list for my work because it helps me stay organised and meet deadlines. For example, planning tasks in advance makes it easier to prioritise important jobs and avoid last-minute stress.'

例: I usually make a rough schedule list for my work because it helps me stay organised and meet deadlines. For example, planning tasks in advance makes it easier to prioritise important jobs and avoid last-minute stress.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to contrast ideas, such as 'On one hand... On the other hand...'. Also, be specific in your explanation.

例: From my observation, some people prefer flexibility and spontaneity because it boosts creativity. On the other hand, others function better with a rough plan of their day to stay organised.

提案: Simplify your sentences and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'however' correctly to connect ideas. For example, 'I used to use my phone notes more when I was younger; however, now I prefer writing in a physical notebook because I revisit it more often.'

例: I used to use my phone notes more when I was younger; however, now I prefer writing in a physical notebook because I revisit it more often and it helps me stay accountable.

× I would say it depends.

✓ I would say it depends.

This sentence is correct as it uses the modal 'would' appropriately to express conditional or habitual action, so no correction is needed.

× Umm, usually when it's the period when I'm not short on money.

✓ Umm, usually when it's the period when I'm not short of money.

The correct phrase is 'short of money' rather than 'short on money'. 'Short of' is the standard preposition used to indicate lacking something.

× Sometimes I would go and purchase spontaneously.

✓ Sometimes I go and purchase spontaneously.

Using 'would' here is unnecessary because the sentence describes a habitual action in the present. The simple present tense 'go' is more appropriate.

× However during times that I'm on budget I would make a list on the note and try to adhere to it to a while over consumption as well as overspending.

✓ However, during times when I'm on a budget, I make a list on a note and try to adhere to it to avoid overconsumption as well as overspending.

The phrase 'on budget' should be 'on a budget' with the article 'a'. 'During times that' is better as 'during times when'. 'Make a list on the note' should be 'make a list on a note'. 'Try to adhere to it to a while over consumption' is incorrect; it should be 'try to adhere to it to avoid overconsumption'. Also, 'over consumption' should be one word 'overconsumption'.

× Yes, I usually make a rough list of schedule for my work because it helps me stay organized and meet deadlines.

✓ Yes, I usually make a rough schedule list for my work because it helps me stay organized and meet deadlines.

The phrase 'list of schedule' is awkward; 'schedule list' or 'rough schedule' is better. Also, 'schedule' is a countable noun here, so 'a rough schedule list' is clearer.

× For example, when I plan my tasks in advance, I find it easier for prioritize important jobs and avoid last minute stress.

✓ For example, when I plan my tasks in advance, I find it easier to prioritize important jobs and avoid last-minute stress.

The phrase 'easier for prioritize' is incorrect; it should be 'easier to prioritize'. Also, 'last minute' as an adjective should be hyphenated to 'last-minute'.

× So overall I'm making a list definitely as it improves my product.

✓ So overall, I definitely make a list as it improves my productivity.

'I'm making a list definitely' is awkward; 'I definitely make a list' is clearer. Also, 'improves my product' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'improves my productivity'.

× I think this is because there are two types of people, at least from my observation.

✓ I think this is because there are two types of people, at least from my observations.

The plural 'observations' is more appropriate here as it refers to multiple instances or experiences.

× Umm, the first type enjoy flexibility and so being able to be spontaneous improves the creativity and improvisation, whereas other people might function better when they have a rough picture of what they would do in the day.

✓ Umm, the first type enjoys flexibility, and being able to be spontaneous improves creativity and improvisation, whereas other people might function better when they have a rough picture of what they will do during the day.

The subject 'the first type' is singular, so the verb should be 'enjoys'. The phrase 'and so being able to be spontaneous' is better as 'and being able to be spontaneous'. 'The creativity and improvisation' should be 'creativity and improvisation' without 'the'. 'What they would do in the day' is better as 'what they will do during the day' for clarity and tense consistency.

× Whilst younger, I used to utilize my phone notes a lot more compared to these days, however I find that I don't revisit the list on my phone, so it's actually easier to write down on a physical notebook and revisit later in the day, which allows me to take accountability.

✓ When I was younger, I used to utilize my phone notes a lot more compared to these days; however, I find that I don't revisit the list on my phone, so it's actually easier to write it down in a physical notebook and revisit it later in the day, which allows me to take accountability.

'Whilst younger' is incomplete; it should be 'When I was younger'. A semicolon or period is better than a comma before 'however'. 'Write down on a physical notebook' should be 'write it down in a physical notebook'. Also, 'revisit later' should be 'revisit it later' to clarify the object.