List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons. For example, say "Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember important items and avoid forgetting them."

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember important items and avoid forgetting them.

提案: Improve your sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say "Yes, I make a list for my work, and it works well because it boosts my confidence and helps me track my progress over time."

例: Yes, I make a list for my work, and it works well because it boosts my confidence and helps me track my progress over time.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer explanations. Avoid vague phrases. For example, say "Some people prefer not to make lists because they focus on working hard without tracking progress, while others find lists useful to monitor their achievements over time."

例: Some people prefer not to make lists because they focus on working hard without tracking progress, while others find lists useful to monitor their achievements over time.

提案: Work on grammar and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say "I usually prefer making lists on my phone rather than on paper because it is easy to use and carry. Moreover, I can track my progress anywhere, which is not possible with paper lists."

例: I usually prefer making lists on my phone rather than on paper because it is easy to use and carry. Moreover, I can track my progress anywhere, which is not possible with paper lists.

× we forget the some things which aren't, which are more important than the other things

✓ we forget some things which are more important than others

The phrase 'the some things' is incorrect because 'some' is a quantifier that does not require 'the'. Also, 'which aren't' is incomplete and unclear. The corrected sentence removes unnecessary words and clarifies the meaning by saying 'some things which are more important than others'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I do make a list on the things on work

✓ I do make a list of the things at work

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate the content of a list is 'of', and to indicate location or context, 'at' is appropriate for 'work'. Hence, 'a list of the things at work' is the correct phrase.

× Yes it do work

✓ Yes, it does work

The subject 'it' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Adding a comma after 'Yes' improves readability.

× It helps me to to track my progress over the over the time

✓ It helps me to track my progress over time

The phrase 'over the over the time' is repetitive and incorrect. The correct expression is 'over time' without 'the'. Also, the repeated 'to' is a typographical error. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× Some people have their different mindset

✓ Some people have a different mindset

The possessive pronoun 'their' is unnecessary here because 'mindset' is singular and the phrase 'a different mindset' is the correct expression. Using 'their' with a singular noun causes confusion.

× some of them use usually like to track their progress over the years, over the decades

✓ some of them usually like to track their progress over the years, over the decades

The word order is incorrect. 'Use usually like' is not correct. The adverb 'usually' should come before the verb 'like'. The corrected sentence places 'usually' correctly to convey the intended meaning.

× I usually prefer to make list on my phone than on paper

✓ I usually prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper

The phrase 'make list' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'prefer ... than' is incorrect; the correct comparative structure is 'prefer ... rather than ...'. This correction fixes both article usage and comparative structure.

× because phone is easy to use, easy to carry

✓ because the phone is easy to use and easy to carry

The noun 'phone' is singular and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific object. Also, adding 'and' improves sentence flow. This correction addresses article usage and sentence clarity.

× But in case of paper I do not have AI do not I couldn't track my progress wherever I wanted

✓ But in the case of paper, I do not have AI, so I couldn't track my progress wherever I wanted

The phrase 'in case of paper' needs the definite article 'the'. The sentence also contains a confusing phrase 'I do not have AI do not I', which seems to be a typographical error. Replacing it with 'I do not have AI, so' clarifies the meaning. Commas are added for readability.