List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. For example, instead of repeating 'make a list', you could use synonyms like 'prepare a list' or 'write down items'. Also, linking your reasons with words like 'therefore' or 'as a result' would make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I always prepare a list before shopping because I like to plan ahead. As a result, my shopping trips are quicker and I avoid forgetting any items I need.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but could be more concise and structured. Avoid starting sentences with 'So' and try to use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, clarify your reasoning with more specific details to make your answer more effective.

例: Usually, I don't make a list for work because it stresses me when tasks aren't completed in order. Therefore, I prefer to handle tasks as they come instead of following a fixed list.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrasing. Try to avoid repeating 'because' multiple times in one sentence. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words like 'since' or 'as' to improve coherence. Providing a clearer explanation will make your answer more natural and effective.

例: Some people dislike making lists since they feel overwhelmed by having to follow a strict order, and they prefer to stay flexible with their tasks.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive. Try to avoid repeating the same idea twice and use linking words like 'however' or 'nowadays' to improve flow. Also, be careful with phrasing like 'my wallet is in my phone' which can be confusing; you might mean you use your phone for payments.

例: I used to make lists on paper; however, nowadays I prefer using my phone because I carry it everywhere and it also serves as my wallet for payments, making it very convenient.

× This not only helps me to make my shopping trip quicker but also ensures that I buy everything I need to get and not forget anything.

✓ This not only helps me make my shopping trip quicker but also ensures that I buy everything I need and do not forget anything.

The phrase 'helps me to make' is grammatically correct but in English, it is more natural and common to use 'helps me make' without 'to'. Also, 'need to get' is redundant; 'need' alone suffices. Additionally, 'not forget anything' should be 'do not forget anything' to maintain parallel structure and clarity.

× Some people do not like making lists because that may might make them overwhelmed because they have to do something in the same order as the middle list because they like to be flexible.

✓ Some people do not like making lists because it might make them feel overwhelmed as they have to do things in the same order as the list, and they like to be flexible.

The original sentence has multiple 'because' conjunctions causing confusion and redundancy. 'That may might' is incorrect; 'might' alone is sufficient. 'Make them overwhelmed' should be 'make them feel overwhelmed' for correct expression. Also, 'middle list' is unclear and likely a mistake; 'the list' is appropriate. Using 'as' and 'and' improves sentence flow and clarity.

× I used to make list on paper before, but now I think it is more convenient for me to make a list on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere, even my wallet is in my phone.

✓ I used to make lists on paper before, but now I think it is more convenient for me to make a list on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere; even my wallet is on my phone.

The phrase 'make list' should be 'make lists' to indicate plural. The preposition 'on paper' is correct. 'My wallet is in my phone' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on my phone' because digital items are 'on' devices. Also, a semicolon improves sentence separation and clarity.