List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific supporting details. Also, avoid irrelevant information like 'I make a lot of money' which does not relate to the question. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop. I prefer to explore different shops and buy things that catch my interest, as long as they fit my budget. This way, shopping feels more enjoyable and spontaneous.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clarity. Try to answer directly and explain your reason clearly. Avoid vague expressions like 'brain sinking with the melody'. Use simple and clear language with linking words to connect your ideas.

例: No, I don't make a list for my work. I believe that working without a strict plan allows my creativity to flow better, so I prefer to be spontaneous and flexible during my tasks.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete or incorrect phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it restricts their freedom. They prefer to go with the flow and handle tasks as they come, which helps them feel more relaxed and creative.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but can be improved by making it more concise and structured. Start with a direct answer, then explain your preference with specific reasons using linking words.

例: Although I don't usually make lists, if I had to choose, I would prefer using my phone because it is convenient and I can carry it everywhere as a reminder.

× Well shopping is the best hobby I could ever possess, but no I do not make.

✓ Well, shopping is the best hobby I could ever possess, but no, I do not make a list.

The original sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'list' and is incomplete. Adding 'a list' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× At least when I go to shop I randomly enjoy the shop, explore new thing, new outlet there and and shop what I want under my budget.

✓ At least when I go shopping, I randomly enjoy the shops, explore new things, new outlets there, and shop for what I want within my budget.

The nouns 'thing' and 'outlet' should be plural to match the context. Also, 'go to shop' should be 'go shopping' and 'shop what I want' should be 'shop for what I want' to be grammatically correct.

× But yes I do make a lot of money.

✓ But yes, I do make a lot of money.

This sentence is grammatically correct but missing commas for clarity.

× No, I do not make any list for my work too.

✓ No, I do not make any lists for my work either.

The noun 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match 'any', and 'too' is better replaced with 'either' in negative sentences.

× So when there is nothing in my head, I think creativity explores within.

✓ So when there is nothing in my head, I think creativity explores within me.

The phrase 'explores within' is incomplete; adding 'me' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× The creativity within myself goes hand to hand with my brain sinking with the melody.

✓ The creativity within myself goes hand in hand with my brain syncing with the melody.

The correct phrase is 'hand in hand' not 'hand to hand'. Also, 'sinking' should be 'syncing' to mean working together.

× If there is planning, I think the brain *******.

✓ If there is planning, I think the brain gets overwhelmed.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'gets overwhelmed' completes the thought and corrects the sentence.

× So I think making a list, planning the whole day isn't right for your brain to give it more strength.

✓ So I think making a list and planning the whole day isn't right for your brain to give it more strength.

Using 'and' instead of a comma correctly connects the two actions as a compound subject.

× I do not make any list but umm if I have to prefer any of it.

✓ I do not make any list but umm if I have to prefer any of them.

'Any of it' is incorrect when referring to countable items; 'any of them' is appropriate.

× And I would definitely prefer my phone because it is very handy and I could carry it everywhere for my reminder.

✓ And I would definitely prefer my phone because it is very handy and I can carry it everywhere as a reminder.

'Could' implies past ability; 'can' is correct for present ability. Also, 'for my reminder' should be 'as a reminder' for correct prepositional use.