List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember the items I need. For example, it ensures I don't forget essential groceries when I go to the store.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. To improve, use clearer sentence structures and linking words to explain how you prioritize tasks. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I often make a list for my work. I prioritize tasks from the most important to the least important, which helps me stay organized and complete my work efficiently.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like "In my opinion, I think" and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, provide more specific reasons or examples.

例: Some people dislike making lists because it takes time and they prefer to work spontaneously. For instance, they might find writing lists boring or restrictive.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. To improve, use complete sentences, correct grammar, and linking words to explain your preference clearly and logically.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is easy to carry and I can add items anytime. Since I always have my phone with me, I rarely forget what I have written, unlike paper lists which I might lose.

× Yes I love to make a list when I saw because it helps in help.

✓ Yes, I love to make a list when I shop because it helps.

The verb 'saw' is the past tense of 'see' and is incorrect in this context. The correct verb should be 'shop' to match the present tense and meaning of the sentence. Also, 'helps in help' is redundant and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'helps'.

× It helps me remember the items that I use.

✓ It helps me remember the items that I need to use.

The verb 'use' in this context should be in the infinitive form 'to use' or expressed as 'need to use' to indicate purpose. The original sentence is unclear and incomplete in meaning.

× I have came to buy and I never forget what to take home.

✓ I have come to buy and I never forget what to take home.

The past participle of 'come' is 'come', not 'came'. 'Have came' is incorrect; it should be 'have come' to form the present perfect tense.

× I list the important works, the important job that I need to do first in the order to important to the least important and it works very fine for me.

✓ I list the important tasks, the important jobs that I need to do first in order from the most important to the least important, and it works very well for me.

The word 'works' should be pluralized to 'tasks' or 'jobs' to match the context. Also, 'works very fine' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'works very well'. The phrase 'in the order to important to the least important' is awkward and should be 'in order from the most important to the least important'.

× They most often they like to do the work spontaneously.

✓ Most often, they like to do the work spontaneously.

The phrase 'They most often they' is redundant and incorrect. The correct structure is 'Most often, they...'. Removing the extra 'they' improves sentence clarity.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is very easiest to carry around and also to add it on the go.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is the easiest to carry around and also easy to add to on the go.

The phrase 'very easiest' is incorrect because 'easiest' is a superlative adjective and should be preceded by 'the' without 'very'. Also, 'to add it on the go' is awkward; 'easy to add to on the go' is clearer.

× And I always carry my phone with me so it is very rare to forget what I have written because on if I write it on paper I may.

✓ I always carry my phone with me, so it is very rare for me to forget what I have written. If I write it on paper, I might forget it.

The original sentence is a run-on and confusing. It needs to be split into two sentences for clarity. Also, 'because on if I write it on paper I may' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The corrected version clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.