List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些不自然，句子结构混乱，表达不够清晰。建议你直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并避免重复和语法错误。

例: I usually don't make a list when I shop, but if I go to the bakery, I sometimes write one to avoid forgetting important items.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和词汇重复，建议使用正确的时态和词汇，句子更连贯。可以用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I make a list every morning before work. It is very helpful and efficient because it helps me remember and prioritize the most important tasks for the day.

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达有误。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体原因支持，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they have a strong memory and can remember things easily. However, others prefer lists as a tool to help them remember important tasks.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子，明确表达偏好，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I usually write them before I start work. Having a notebook on the table reminds me to check my tasks. Also, I can bring it when visiting clients.

× If I do a Baker shopping I might do a list but in case I forgot to I will forget to buy something important.

✓ If I do bakery shopping I might make a list but in case I forget to, I will forget to buy something important.

The phrase 'Baker shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'bakery shopping' (uncountable noun). Also, 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make a list'. The verb tense 'forgot' should be 'forget' to maintain the conditional present tense.

× Otherwise, if you're not shopping, I'm not. I'm not perfecting this.

✓ Otherwise, if you're not shopping, I'm not either. I'm not perfect at this.

The phrase 'I'm not' is incomplete and unclear; adding 'either' clarifies the meaning. 'Perfecting' is the wrong form; the correct adjective is 'perfect'.

× Yes I did. I like to make a list for an in the morning before I start my work.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to make a list in the morning before I start my work.

The question is in present tense, so the answer should be in present tense ('do' instead of 'did'). The phrase 'for an in the morning' is incorrect; it should be 'in the morning'.

× It's really helpful and efficiency and efficient.

✓ It's really helpful and efficient.

'Efficiency' is a noun and does not fit here; the correct adjective 'efficient' should be used. Also, 'helpful and efficient' are parallel adjectives.

× It can help me to remember and highlight the most important thing to do during whole day.

✓ It can help me to remember and highlight the most important things to do during the whole day.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' because it refers to multiple tasks. Also, 'during whole day' needs the definite article 'the' before 'whole day'.

× It's really helped me a lot.

✓ It has really helped me a lot.

The present perfect tense 'has helped' is appropriate here to indicate an action that has relevance to the present.

× Are there too many different type of persons based on their memories?

✓ Are there too many different types of people based on their memories?

'Type' should be plural 'types' to agree with 'too many'. 'Persons' is less common; 'people' is preferred.

× Some people they have a very strong memory so they don't really like to make list.

✓ Some people have a very strong memory so they don't really like to make lists.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'Some people'. Also, 'make list' should be 'make lists'.

× But some people that memory is not good.

✓ But for some people, their memory is not good.

The original sentence lacks proper structure; adding 'for' and 'their' clarifies the meaning.

× So make a list is like a tool for them to remember the things so and it also based on different.

✓ So making a list is like a tool for them to remember things, and it also depends on differences.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear; 'make a list' should be 'making a list'. The phrase 'so and it also based on different' is incorrect and rephrased for clarity.

× I prefer to make this on my paper because most of the time I make list of doing before I start to walk,

✓ I prefer to make this on paper because most of the time I make a to-do list before I start to work,

'On my paper' is better as 'on paper'. 'Make list of doing' is incorrect; 'make a to-do list' is correct. 'Start to walk' should be 'start to work'.

× so the notebook and the pain just on the table is very convenient for me and it's easy to remind me to check my notebook.

✓ so the notebook and the pen just on the table are very convenient for me and they easily remind me to check my notebook.

'Pain' is a typo for 'pen'. The subject is plural ('notebook and pen'), so the verb should be 'are'. 'It's easy to remind me' is incorrect; 'they easily remind me' is better.

× Sometimes if I go to visit the clients, I will bring my notebook to them so I can still carry the memories and carry the same list to do I.

✓ Sometimes if I go to visit clients, I bring my notebook with me so I can still carry the memories and carry the same to-do list.

'Will bring' is better as 'bring' for habitual action. 'Carry the same list to do I' is incorrect; 'carry the same to-do list' is correct.