List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议注意动词单复数一致性，避免句子未完成，同时可以使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I often make a list when I shop because it helps me find the proper items I need and avoid impulsive purchases that could cause financial burden. Moreover, it keeps me well organized and enhances my shopping experience by making it more efficient.

提案: 回答中时态使用不一致，且部分表达不够自然，建议统一时态并使用更地道的表达，同时适当使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. Making a list helps me stay organized and manage my time better. It allows me to prioritize tasks, which increases my productivity and efficiency. As a result, I can stay focused and complete my professional tasks on time.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Some people don't like making lists because of their personality. They prefer to keep things in their minds and feel that making lists restricts their freedom. Additionally, they find it time-consuming and troublesome, so they prefer to do things directly without planning.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰，建议注意动词形式和词汇搭配，避免用词错误，同时使句子更简洁流畅。

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I enjoy the tactile feeling of writing things down. This process helps improve my memory and handwriting. Also, the tangible experience gives me a sense of achievement.

× Yes, I often make a list because the list help me find the proper things I need to buy and avoid some impulsive and unnecessary purchase which can cause a financial burden.

✓ Yes, I often make a list because the list helps me find the proper things I need to buy and avoid some impulsive and unnecessary purchases which can cause a financial burden.

这里“the list”是单数，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“helps”。另外，“purchase”应为复数“purchases”，因为前面用了“some”，表示不定数量。

× Also, it will make me stay more well organized and I can enhance the shopping experience by finding the.

✓ Also, it helps me stay more well organized and enhances the shopping experience by helping me find the items I need.

原句中“it will make me stay more well organized”时态不一致，应与前文保持一致使用一般现在时。句子末尾不完整，需补充完整表达。

× Making a list helped me stay organized and manage my time better.

✓ Making a list helps me stay organized and manage my time better.

这里描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“helps”，而非过去时“helped”。

× It can prioritize the tasks and increase my productivity, efficiency and help me stay focused to do the professional task.

✓ It can prioritize tasks, increase my productivity and efficiency, and help me stay focused on doing professional tasks.

“the tasks”改为“tasks”更自然；“help me stay focused to do”应改为“help me stay focused on doing”，介词使用错误；“the professional task”应为复数“professional tasks”，因为指多个任务。

× Because it may because of their personality.

✓ Because it may be because of their personality.

原句缺少动词“be”，导致句子结构不完整。

× Some people have a casual personality they like, they just like things in their minds and they think making this may be restricted their freedom and also it's a time consuming act in their eyes.

✓ Some people have a casual personality; they just like to keep things in their minds and think making lists may restrict their freedom and also see it as a time-consuming act.

原句缺少连接词或标点，导致句子结构混乱；“making this may be restricted their freedom”语法错误，应为“making lists may restrict their freedom”；“time consuming”应加连字符。

× Or they think they just want to do the things directly instead of making a list and they think it's very troublesome.

✓ Or they think they just want to do things directly instead of making a list, and they think it's very troublesome.

“the things”应去掉定冠词“the”，因为这里泛指事情。

× I prefer make this on paper because I like the tactile feeling of writing things down and writing the process help me improve my memory tension and I have a good handwriting.

✓ I prefer to make this on paper because I like the tactile feeling of writing things down, and the writing process helps me improve my memory retention. Also, I have good handwriting.

“prefer”后应接不定式“to make”；“writing the process help”主谓不一致，应为“writing process helps”；“memory tension”应为“memory retention”；“a good handwriting”中“handwriting”不可数，前面不加冠词。

× By writing I can improve my writing skills and also the tangible experience I gave me a sense of achievement.

✓ By writing, I can improve my writing skills, and also the tangible experience gives me a sense of achievement.

“I gave me”错误，应为“gives me”；句子缺少逗号，影响阅读。