List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid grammatical errors such as 'didn't used to' (should be 'didn't use to') and 'you gonna' (should be 'you're going to'). Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas logically.

例: I didn't use to make a list, but nowadays I always do because it makes shopping much easier. When I know exactly what I'm going to buy, it saves me a lot of time and helps me spend less money.

提案: Avoid repetition such as 'that works' twice. Also, clarify your ideas and complete your sentences fully. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to explain why making lists helps you. Try to be more specific about how lists help your work.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me organise all the tasks I need to complete during the day. This way, I don't forget anything important and can manage my time better.

提案: Focus on clear grammar and sentence structure. Avoid unclear phrases like 'offer your stuff' and 'making a list is playing'. Try to speculate reasons why some people might dislike lists, using linking words like 'maybe' or 'perhaps'.

例: To be honest, I'm not sure why some people don't like making lists. Maybe they find it boring or prefer to remember things in their head. However, I think lists help people stay organised, especially when they are busy.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, say 'most people nowadays say we shouldn't use paper anymore'. Also, explain why you prefer paper lists with more detail.

例: I prefer to make lists on paper because I find it easier to write things down. Although most people nowadays say we shouldn't use paper anymore, I'm not very good with technology, so paper works best for me.

× I didn't used to make a list, but nowadays I'm always making a list when a shop is much easier.

✓ I didn't use to make a list, but nowadays I'm always making a list because shopping is much easier.

The phrase 'didn't used to' is incorrect; the correct form is 'didn't use to' because 'did' already indicates past tense, so the base form 'use' should be used. Also, 'when a shop is much easier' is unclear and likely a mistake; it should be 'because shopping is much easier' to make sense.

× When you go to the supermarket and you know exactly what you gonna buy, they'll save you a lot of time and you spend much less.

✓ When you go to the supermarket and you know exactly what you are going to buy, it will save you a lot of time and you will spend much less.

The phrase 'you gonna buy' is informal and grammatically incorrect; it should be 'you are going to buy'. Also, 'they'll save you' is unclear because the subject is not plural; it should be 'it will save you' referring to the list or knowing what to buy. Additionally, 'you spend much less' should be 'you will spend much less' to maintain future tense consistency.

× Yes, I make lists in my work as well and usually that works.

✓ Yes, I make lists at my work as well and usually that works.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to 'work' in this context; the correct preposition is 'at' to indicate the place of work.

× Umm, that helps me forget what I have to do in my day and organize all the tasks that I need to be accomplished during the day.

✓ Umm, that helps me remember what I have to do during my day and organize all the tasks that I need to accomplish.

The original sentence says 'helps me forget' which contradicts the intended meaning; it should be 'helps me remember'. Also, 'tasks that I need to be accomplished' is passive and awkward; it should be 'tasks that I need to accomplish' for active voice and clarity.

× Umm, I start doing a list even for my.

✓ Umm, I even start making a list for myself.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'I start doing a list even for my' lacks an object. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and completes the thought.

× To be honest, I don't know what people doesn't make list because it it's very important.

✓ To be honest, I don't know why people don't make lists because it's very important.

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't' not 'doesn't'. Also, 'make list' should be 'make lists' to agree in number. The phrase 'what people doesn't make list' is incorrect and should be 'why people don't make lists'.

× You make a list in your days and you know exactly what are you gonna do that's much more organized and offer your stuff.

✓ You make a list in your day and you know exactly what you are going to do; that's much more organised and helps you manage your stuff.

The phrase 'in your days' is awkward; 'in your day' is better. The question form 'what are you gonna do' should be statement form 'what you are going to do'. 'Offer your stuff' is unclear; 'helps you manage your stuff' is clearer. Also, 'organised' is spelled in Australian English.

× Especially nowadays that people usually don't have much time to do anything, making a list is playing.

✓ Especially nowadays, when people usually don't have much time to do anything, making a list is helpful.

The phrase 'making a list is playing' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'making a list is helpful'. Also, 'that' should be 'when' to correctly introduce the time clause.

× I prefer to make a list on paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper.

This sentence is correct; no preposition error.

× I know most of the people nowadays say it's not to use paper anymore, but I can't.

✓ I know most people nowadays say not to use paper anymore, but I can't.

The phrase 'it's not to use paper anymore' is incorrect; it should be 'say not to use paper anymore'. Also, 'most of the people' can be simplified to 'most people'.

× I'm not so good with technology and I know I need to improve that.

✓ I'm not very good with technology and I know I need to improve.

The phrase 'improve that' is awkward; it's better to say 'improve' without 'that'. Also, 'not so good' can be better expressed as 'not very good' for clarity.