List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi doğrudan soruya yanıt verecek şekilde yapılandırmalı ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltmalısınız. Örneğin, alışveriş yaparken neden liste yapmadığınızı daha açık ve net açıklayabilirsiniz.

例: No, I don't usually make a list when I shop because I prefer to buy things spontaneously based on what I need at the moment.

提案: Cümlenizi daha açık ve mantıklı hale getirmek için yapıyı basitleştirin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak düşüncelerinizi daha iyi bağlayın. Ayrıca, ifadelerinizi daha doğru ve doğal İngilizce ile ifade etmeye çalışın.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me organize my tasks better and save time.

提案: Daha net ve doğal ifadeler kullanarak neden liste yapmayı sevmediğinizi açıklayın. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha akıcı ve mantıklı bağlaçlarla birleştirin.

例: Some people, including me, don't like making lists because we prefer to be spontaneous and decide what to buy at the moment.

提案: Cümlenizi daha açık ve düzgün bir şekilde ifade edin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak neden telefonun kağıttan daha kullanışlı olduğunu açıklayın ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's always with me and more convenient than paper, which can be lost or damaged.

× No, I don't because I want to shop regularly and in I want to buy what's in my head and I shop on randomly what I want or what I need right now.

✓ No, I don't because I want to shop regularly and I want to buy what's in my head, and I shop randomly for what I want or need right now.

The sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary prepositions. 'in I want' is incorrect and should be 'I want'. 'shop on randomly' is incorrect; 'shop randomly' is correct. Also, 'what I want or what I need' can be simplified to 'what I want or need'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× If I do a list that will be work because making a plan or just a list it makes on the time use more useless way.

✓ If I make a list, it will work because making a plan or just a list helps to use time more efficiently.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and awkward phrasing. 'do a list' should be 'make a list'. 'that will be work' should be 'it will work'. 'it makes on the time use more useless way' is unclear and should be 'helps to use time more efficiently'. These changes correct verb usage and improve sentence clarity.

× You can buy more things and you can use time more good.

✓ You can buy more things and you can use time better.

'more good' is incorrect; the correct comparative adverb is 'better'. This correction fixes the adverb usage to properly compare the quality of time usage.

× I think I'm that kind of person.

✓ I think I'm that kind of person who doesn't like making lists.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'who doesn't like making lists' clarifies the meaning and completes the thought.

× I want to buy whatever, whatever what I want in randomly like that.

✓ I want to buy whatever I want randomly like that.

The phrase 'whatever, whatever what I want' is redundant and incorrect. Removing the extra 'whatever' and 'what' corrects the pronoun usage and makes the sentence clearer.

× I think phone is more useful because paper can be lost or get wet or something like that but telephone always with us and use the use for use to easy than the paper.

✓ I think the phone is more useful because paper can be lost or get wet, but the phone is always with us and is easier to use than paper.

Missing articles before 'phone' and 'paper' are corrected by adding 'the'. 'telephone always with us' is incomplete; it should be 'the phone is always with us'. 'use the use for use to easy' is incorrect and corrected to 'is easier to use'. These corrections fix article usage, sentence structure, and clarity.