List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'bad option' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cách bạn lập danh sách mua sắm.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list to manage my budget effectively. For example, I allocate a specific amount of money for each item to avoid overspending, especially when I shop at big malls.

提案: Bạn trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng câu nói có phần lặp lại và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, bạn nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể hơn về cách danh sách giúp bạn trong công việc.

例: Yes, I usually make a to-do list at work to stay organized and avoid forgetting tasks. For instance, at the end of the day, I review my list to see what I have completed and plan for the next day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn lý do tại sao một số người không thích lập danh sách.

例: Some people dislike making lists because it takes time and feels tedious. However, those who manage their time well find lists helpful to organize and prioritize tasks.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và câu không hoàn chỉnh, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ và giải thích rõ lý do bạn thích dùng điện thoại hơn giấy.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and I don't have to worry about losing the list. Unlike paper lists, digital ones are easy to edit and always accessible.

× I can manage the money that I distribute to each to each item that I buy.

✓ I can manage the money that I distribute to each item that I buy.

The phrase 'each to each item' is incorrect due to repetition. The correct phrase is 'each item' to indicate individual items. This is a singular and plural issue because 'each' refers to singular items, so 'to each to each' is redundant and incorrect.

× So yeah this is my bad option and must do thing when I go to a shop like central shopping.

✓ So yeah, this is my bad habit and a must-do thing when I go to a shop like Central Shopping.

The phrase 'bad option' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'bad habit'. Also, 'must do thing' should be 'must-do thing' to function as a compound adjective. Capitalization of 'Central Shopping' as a proper noun is also necessary.

× I tend to conduct a making a list activities when I work because yeah, I want to get, I want to stay organized and ensure I don't forget important tasks.

✓ I tend to make a list when I work because, yeah, I want to stay organized and ensure I don't forget important tasks.

The phrase 'conduct a making a list activities' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'make a list'. 'Conduct' is not used with 'making a list activities'. Also, 'get' is unnecessary and confusing here.

× And during the day where I look at what has that I've done, I can, I can calculate how well my work is.

✓ And during the day, when I look at what I've done, I can calculate how well my work is.

The phrase 'where I look at what has that I've done' is incorrect. 'Where' should be 'when' to refer to time. Also, 'has that' is unnecessary and incorrect.

× For some people, they don't like making lists because yeah, this activity is quite time consuming.

✓ Some people don't like making lists because, yeah, this activity is quite time-consuming.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'some people'. Also, 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective.

× But for those whose money management, whose time management is good, they will, they will consider that making list is a very important activity to control and distribute tasks.

✓ But for those whose money management and time management are good, they will consider that making lists is a very important activity to control and distribute tasks.

The phrase 'whose money management, whose time management is good' is awkward. It should be 'whose money management and time management are good' to correctly connect the two subjects. Also, 'making list' should be 'making lists'.

× Actually, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it's easier and more convenient rather than do it on paper.

✓ Actually, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it's easier and more convenient than doing it on paper.

The phrase 'rather than do it on paper' is incorrect. The correct form is 'more convenient than doing it on paper' to maintain parallel structure.

× When I do it in paper, I can face to a physical decades, but when my phone I'm I'm not scared of data lost because yeah.

✓ When I do it on paper, I face physical drawbacks, but with my phone, I'm not scared of data loss because, yeah.

The preposition 'in paper' should be 'on paper'. The phrase 'face to a physical decades' is incorrect; likely intended 'face physical drawbacks'. 'Data lost' should be 'data loss'. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.