List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating 'really' and 'go shopping'. Also, use correct grammar such as 'it assists me' instead of 'it assist me'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I enjoy shopping a lot, so I always make a list before I go. This helps me buy everything I need and also saves me transportation costs and energy.

提案: Focus on clarity and grammar. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I can I am able to'. Use linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to be more specific about how the list helps you.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized. As a result, I can complete my tasks efficiently without forgetting anything important.

提案: Use simpler and more natural expressions. Avoid awkward phrases like 'whenever and stressed when they make list'. Also, try to explain the reasons more clearly and use linking words.

例: Some people dislike making lists because it makes them feel stressed and burdened. Moreover, it can reduce their enthusiasm and sense of freedom.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding phrases like 'I really admire to make list'. Use simpler expressions and avoid repetition such as 'time by time whenever'.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient. Since I always have my phone with me, I can easily check my to-do list anytime.

× Being a shopaholic person, I really admire to go shopping so I really prefer to make list whenever I go for shopping because it helps me to buy everything that I want.

✓ Being a shopaholic person, I really admire going shopping so I really prefer to make a list whenever I go shopping because it helps me to buy everything that I want.

The verb 'admire' should be followed by the gerund form 'going' instead of the infinitive 'to go'. Also, 'make list' should be 'make a list' because 'list' is a countable noun and requires an article here. Additionally, 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go shopping'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Consequently it assist me to save my transportation cost at energy.

✓ Consequently, it assists me in saving my transportation cost and energy.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'assists' not 'assist'. Also, the phrase 'save my transportation cost at energy' is awkward; it should be 'saving my transportation cost and energy' to correctly express the idea. The preposition 'in' is used with 'assist' when followed by a gerund.

× Certainly, I really make a list for my work and it indeed work because it helps me to be organized and I can I am able to fulfill my To Do List very easily without forgetting anything important.

✓ Certainly, I really make a list for my work and it indeed works because it helps me to be organized and I am able to fulfill my To Do List very easily without forgetting anything important.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'works' instead of 'work'. Also, the phrase 'I can I am able to' is redundant; 'I am able to' suffices. These corrections ensure subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× Some people really abhor making lists because they can feel more burdened whenever and stressed when they make list and it also hinders their feeling of enthusiasm and the feeling of freedom in them.

✓ Some people really abhor making lists because they can feel more burdened and stressed when they make lists, and it also hinders their feelings of enthusiasm and freedom.

The phrase 'whenever and stressed when' is awkward; it should be 'and stressed when'. Also, 'make list' should be 'make lists' to agree in number. 'Feeling of enthusiasm and the feeling of freedom in them' is better expressed as 'feelings of enthusiasm and freedom'. These changes improve grammatical correctness and fluency.

× I really admire to make list on my phone as it is more convenient because my phone is with me all the time, so I can easily check my To Do List time by time whenever I use my mobile phone.

✓ I really admire making lists on my phone as it is more convenient because my phone is with me all the time, so I can easily check my To Do List from time to time whenever I use my mobile phone.

The verb 'admire' should be followed by the gerund 'making' instead of the infinitive 'to make'. Also, 'make list' should be 'making lists' to be grammatically correct. The phrase 'time by time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'from time to time'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.