List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence. For example, start with 'Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized.' Then add, 'Moreover, I use my mobile phone to keep the list handy and avoid buying unnecessary items.'

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized. Moreover, I use my mobile phone to keep the list handy and avoid buying unnecessary items.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid repetition and clarify your points. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, start with 'Yes, making a list for work is effective for me.' Then add, 'Previously, I used to buy many unnecessary items, but now the list helps me track what I really need.'

例: Yes, making a list for work is effective for me. Previously, I used to buy many unnecessary items, but now the list helps me track what I really need.

提案: Provide a more developed answer with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly. For instance, say 'Some people dislike making lists because they are not used to the habit. Additionally, they might find it time-consuming or restrictive.'

例: Some people dislike making lists because they are not used to the habit. Additionally, they might find it time-consuming or restrictive.

提案: Try to avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence flow by using linking words. For example, say 'I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it is more accessible and convenient, as I use my phone most of the time.'

例: I prefer making lists on my mobile phone because it is more accessible and convenient, as I use my phone most of the time.

× it makes me on track

✓ it keeps me on track

The phrase 'makes me on track' is incorrect because 'make' is not used with 'on track' in this context. The correct verb is 'keep' to express maintaining a state. So, 'it keeps me on track' is the proper expression.

× I usually take a list, make a list in my mobile

✓ I usually make a list on my mobile

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'mobile'. The correct preposition is 'on' when referring to making a list using a mobile device. Also, 'take a list' is unnecessary and redundant here.

× Before that when I was not using list, I randomly buy so many things which were not needed, needed actually.

✓ Before that, when I was not using a list, I randomly bought so many things which were not needed, actually.

The verb 'buy' should be in past tense 'bought' to match the past time frame indicated by 'was not using'. Also, 'using list' needs an article 'a list'.

× So I now it's helped me to keep a track and making me realize what I need and what I don't so.

✓ So now it has helped me to keep track and made me realize what I need and what I don't.

The phrase 'keep a track' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'keep track' without an article. Also, 'making me realize' should be 'made me realize' to maintain past tense consistency. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Because they are not in habit of making list.

✓ Because they are not in the habit of making lists.

The phrase 'in habit' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in the habit'. Also, 'making list' requires an article and plural form: 'making lists'.

× That could be the only one reason for that.

✓ That could be the only reason for that.

The phrase 'only one reason' is redundant; 'only reason' is sufficient and more natural. No plural issue here, but simplification improves clarity.

× I prefer to make it on my mobile phone because it is more accessible for me and I'm using most of the time I'm using mobile so it's more convenient for me.

✓ I prefer to make it on my mobile phone because it is more accessible for me and I use my mobile most of the time, so it's more convenient for me.

The phrase 'I'm using most of the time I'm using mobile' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'I use my mobile most of the time' to express habitual action. Also, 'using mobile' needs an article 'my mobile'.