List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me stay organized and saves time. Since I don't shop often, having a list ensures I buy everything I need in one trip.

提案: Your response is relevant and structured, but some sentences are slightly repetitive and could be more concise. Use linking words like 'because' or 'therefore' to improve coherence and avoid filler words such as 'so' and 'and'.

例: Yes, I make a daily to-do list because I am very busy. It helps me stay organized and focus on important tasks, so it definitely works well for me.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat repetitive and lacks specific examples. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I think' and provide clearer reasons with linking words to improve flow.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it hard to prioritize tasks effectively. As a result, their work may be less organized, but if that method suits them, it's understandable.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains incomplete sentences and some redundancy. Try to combine ideas into complete sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to improve coherence.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I always have it with me. This way, I can easily check my tasks throughout the day and avoid losing paper lists since I tend to be forgetful.

× I don't shop usually often, but when I do I do make a list.

✓ I don't usually shop often, but when I do, I do make a list.

The adverb 'usually' should be placed before the main verb 'shop' to correctly modify it. Placing 'usually' after 'shop' is incorrect adverb placement. Also, a comma is needed before 'I do make a list' to separate the clauses.

× So and I think it really works for me to make a list of what I need to do.

✓ So, I think it really works for me to make a list of what I need to do.

The phrase 'So and I think' is incorrect conjunction use. The conjunction 'and' is unnecessary here and should be removed. Also, a comma after 'So' improves sentence clarity.

× Well, many people do not prefer to make a list because I think they cannot fully prioritize what they need to do 1st and next.

✓ Well, many people do not prefer to make a list because I think they cannot fully prioritize what they need to do first and next.

Using '1st' in formal speech or writing is inappropriate; it should be spelled out as 'first'. This correction improves sentence structure and formality.

× I think their work is a bit unorganized, but at the end of the day, if that's what they feel comfortable doing, I think they should just.

✓ I think their work is a bit unorganized, but at the end of the day, if that's what they feel comfortable doing, I think they should just do that.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'should just.' It lacks a verb or object to complete the thought. Adding 'do that' completes the sentence structure properly.

× Moreover, I am very forgetful and I may sometimes forget the piece of paper which I used to write down the lists of things I need to do and.

✓ Moreover, I am very forgetful and I may sometimes forget the piece of paper on which I wrote down the list of things I need to do.

The sentence ends with 'and' which is incomplete. Also, 'which I used to write down the lists' is awkward; 'on which I wrote down the list' is more appropriate. 'Lists' should be singular 'list' to match the context.