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提案: Try to use more natural and grammatically correct expressions. Avoid repeating phrases like "go to shopping" and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list to ensure I don't forget anything. For instance, last time I went shopping with my friends, I managed to buy everything I needed in just 10 minutes, which was very efficient.

提案: Clarify your answer by using correct vocabulary and grammar. Instead of "job currency," say "a specific job currently." Use linking words like "however" properly and avoid vague phrases like "Beside it."

例: Actually, I don't have a job at the moment, but I often make lists for my studies, especially when preparing for exams. This helps me organize my time effectively and avoid wasting it.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid repetition and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Provide more specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it difficult to create or follow them. Additionally, they may feel that making lists wastes time, so they prefer to do tasks spontaneously, even though this can be inefficient.

提案: Improve clarity by choosing the correct words; for example, say "I prefer paper lists rather than phone lists." Also, complete your sentences and avoid unclear phrases like "save my." Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: I prefer making lists on paper rather than on my phone because having the paper on my desk reminds me of my tasks, helping me stay organized and avoid confusion or wasting time.

× The main reason I make a list when I go to shopping is to remember everything I need when I go to shop.

✓ The main reason I make a list when I go shopping is to remember everything I need when I go shopping.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect because 'shopping' is a gerund here and does not require the preposition 'to'. The correct form is 'go shopping'. This is a common mistake with verbs of movement followed by activities.

× I remember last time when I go with my friends in the shopping, I really pick up everything I need in 10 minutes.

✓ I remember last time when I went with my friends shopping, I really picked up everything I needed in 10 minutes.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'go' becomes 'went', 'pick up' becomes 'picked up', and 'need' becomes 'needed'. Also, 'in the shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'shopping' without 'the'.

× I remember last time when I go with my friends in the shopping, I really pick up everything I need in 10 minutes.

✓ I remember last time when I went with my friends shopping, I really picked up everything I needed in 10 minutes.

The preposition 'in' before 'the shopping' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'go shopping' without any preposition or article. This is a common prepositional error.

× To be honest with you, I don't work because I don't have a specific job currency.

✓ To be honest with you, I don't work because I don't have a specific job currently.

The word 'currency' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'currently', an adverb indicating time. This is a misuse of vocabulary rather than a pronoun, but since no pronoun error is present, this correction is necessary for clarity.

× Beside it, it's very helpful.

✓ Besides that, it's very helpful.

The phrase 'Beside it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'Besides that' to mean 'in addition'. 'Beside' means 'next to', which is not the intended meaning here.

× Moreover, they they just waste most time and they do their things randomly.

✓ Moreover, they just waste most of the time and do their things randomly.

The sentence has a repeated word 'they'. Also, 'most time' should be 'most of the time' to be grammatically correct. The conjunction 'and' is acceptable here, but the sentence is improved by removing redundancy.

× So it it's this is a real waste of time, that's all.

✓ So, it is a real waste of time, that's all.

The phrase 'it it's this is' is redundant and incorrect. It should be simplified to 'it is' or 'it's'. This is a sentence structure and conjunction issue.

× I prefer paperless more than a phone list because I put the paper on my desk and I remember myself that I have a lot of things to do in this time so I avoid wasting time and or get confused and save my.

✓ I prefer paper lists more than phone lists because I put the paper on my desk and remind myself that I have a lot of things to do at this time, so I avoid wasting time or getting confused and save my time.

The word 'paperless' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'paper lists'. Also, 'remember myself' should be 'remind myself'. The phrase 'in this time' should be 'at this time'. The phrase 'and or get confused' is incorrect; it should be 'or getting confused'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'save my', which should be 'save my time'. These are quantifier and phrase usage errors.