List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复和错误用词，同时保持回答简洁且直接回应问题。

例: Sometimes I make a list when I have many things to buy, but usually I just go to the store and buy what I need quickly.

提案: 回答中时态使用不准确，句子结构不够清晰，建议使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更连贯自然。

例: Yes, I make detailed lists for my work, including tasks and time estimates. At first, I follow the list closely, but over time I tend to forget it and work more flexibly.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法和词汇使用错误较多，建议简化表达，使用更准确的词汇和句式来阐述观点。

例: From my experience, some people dislike making lists because unexpected things can happen, and it feels like the list controls their life instead of them controlling it.

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，建议使用简洁明了的句子表达偏好，并说明理由。

例: I prefer to use an app on my phone to make daily lists because it is more detailed and easy to check.

× Sometime I'm safe, I need to buy a dozen of things.

✓ Sometimes I'm safe, I need to buy a dozen things.

这里'sometime'应为复数形式'sometimes'表示有时；'a dozen of things'中'dozen'后不需要加'of'，正确用法是'a dozen things'。

× I may I will made make a list, but most of the times I don't make list.

✓ I may or I will make a list, but most of the time I don't make a list.

'may I will made make'结构混乱，应改为'may or will make'；'most of the times'应为'most of the time'；'make list'缺少冠词，应为'make a list'。

× most of the times I don't make list.

✓ most of the time I don't make a list.

'most of the times'应为不可数名词短语'most of the time'；'make list'缺少冠词'a'。

× most of the times I don't make list.

✓ most of the time I don't make a list.

'list'前应加不定冠词'a'，表示泛指。

× When I need something I just go outside to the store and buy it quickly as possible.

✓ When I need something, I just go outside to the store and buy it as quickly as possible.

'as possible'前应加副词'as quickly as possible'，且句中缺少逗号。

× When I need something I just go outside to the store and buy it quickly as possible.

✓ When I need something, I just go outside to the store and buy it as quickly as possible.

'as quickly as possible'是固定表达，缺少'as'导致表达不完整。

× I'll make a very detailed list including what I need to do and the time I'll spend.

✓ I'll make a very detailed list including what I need to do and the time I'll spend.

此句无明显冠词错误。

× In first several days I will do as what I wrote in the list, but as time passed I forget my list and started to do things.

✓ In the first several days, I will do as I wrote in the list, but as time passed, I forgot my list and started to do things.

'In first several days'应为'In the first several days'；'forget'应为过去式'forgot'与时间状语一致。

× In first several days I will do as what I wrote in the list, but as time passed I forget my list and started to do things.

✓ In the first several days, I will do as I wrote in the list, but as time passed, I forgot my list and started to do things.

'as what I wrote'中'what'多余，应去掉。

× Sometimes when I make try to precipitate my list, there will be unpredictable things happened.

✓ Sometimes when I try to complete my list quickly, unpredictable things happen.

'make try to precipitate'表达错误，应改为'try to complete quickly'；'there will be unpredictable things happened'时态和结构错误，应为'unpredictable things happen'。

× Other times I mean it makes me feeling like I'm doing my list is arranging my life instead of me.

✓ Other times, I feel like making my list is arranging my life instead of me.

'I mean it makes me feeling'表达不自然，应简化为'I feel like'；'doing my list is arranging'结构不正确，应改为'making my list is arranging'。

× Other times I mean it makes me feeling like I'm doing my list is arranging my life instead of me.

✓ Other times, I feel like making my list is arranging my life instead of me.

'me feeling'应为'feel'；'instead of me'表达不清，应保持原意。

× Also I need an app to to make daily daily list to arrange my events.

✓ Also, I need an app to make a daily list to arrange my events.

'daily daily list'重复，应改为'a daily list'；缺少冠词'a'。

× I think it it is very more detailed and easy to be seen.

✓ I think it is much more detailed and easy to see.

'very more'用法错误，应为'much more'；'easy to be seen'应为'easy to see'。