List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'while I go to shopping' and 'help me to remind all things'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary such as 'groceries' instead of 'grocery' and 'remind me of everything' instead of 'help me to remind all things'.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember all the important groceries. For instance, I usually list vegetables, spices, and snacks to ensure I don't forget anything.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to explain why you don't make a list for work and what alternative you use. Also, improve sentence structure and vocabulary for clarity.

例: No, I usually don't make a list for my work because I find it hard to focus on it. Instead, I use the notepad app on my mobile to keep track of my tasks.

提案: Your answer needs to be more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain reasons. Use simpler and more precise vocabulary like 'memory' instead of 'mind storage'.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they think lists include many unimportant things. Moreover, they rely on their strong concentration and good memory instead of writing things down.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Avoid starting with 'Yes' when the question is a choice. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and use correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

例: I prefer to make lists on my mobile phone using a notepad app because my phone is always with me. Also, paper lists can get torn or wet, which is inconvenient.

× I always make a list while I go to shopping because it helps me to not forget any grocery and other things that are important.

✓ I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me not to forget any groceries and other important things.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' using the verb + -ing form without 'to'. Also, 'helps me to not forget' is better expressed as 'helps me not to forget'. Additionally, 'any grocery' should be plural 'any groceries' because it refers to multiple items.

× I always make a list while I go to shopping because it helps me to not forget any grocery and other things that are important.

✓ I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me not to forget any groceries and other important things.

The word 'grocery' is countable and should be pluralized to 'groceries' when referring to multiple items. Also, 'other things that are important' is better phrased as 'other important things' for clarity.

× For example, I usually make a vegetable list, spices and many snacks list that help me to remind all things.

✓ For example, I usually make a vegetable list, a spices list, and a snacks list that help me remember everything.

Lists should be singular and preceded by an article 'a' when enumerated. Also, 'help me to remind all things' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'help me remember everything'.

× No, I usually not make a list for my work as it does not work as contain many attention and I forget what to do and so I not make a schedule or a list of my work.

✓ No, I usually do not make a list for my work as it does not work because it requires a lot of attention and I forget what to do, so I do not make a schedule or a list of my work.

The phrase 'usually not make' is incorrect; it should be 'usually do not make'. Also, 'as contain many attention' is incorrect; it should be 'because it requires a lot of attention'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× That's what I use a notepad in mobile.

✓ That's why I use a notepad on my mobile.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to using an app or notepad on a device. Also, 'mobile' should be preceded by 'my'.

× Some people disliking making list has it contain numerous unimportant things and they do not need a list as their concentration and mind storage is strong as compared to others.

✓ Some people dislike making lists because they contain numerous unimportant things and they do not need a list as their concentration and memory are stronger compared to others.

'Disliking' should be 'dislike' as the verb form. 'Making list' should be 'making lists' (plural). 'Has it contain' is incorrect; it should be 'because they contain'. 'Mind storage' is better expressed as 'memory'. Also, subject-verb agreement and sentence structure are corrected.

× Some people disliking making list has it contain numerous unimportant things and they do not need a list as their concentration and mind storage is strong as compared to others.

✓ Some people dislike making lists because they contain numerous unimportant things and they do not need a list as their concentration and memory are stronger compared to others.

'List' should be plural 'lists' when referring generally. Also, 'concentration and mind storage is' should be 'concentration and memory are' to agree in number.

× Yes, I usually prefer to make list on mobile phone using a notepad app because it was always with me my mobile as compared to list getting the tiered or maybe water wet.

✓ Yes, I usually prefer to make a list on my mobile phone using a notepad app because my mobile is always with me compared to a list getting tired or maybe wet with water.

'Make list' should be 'make a list'. 'It was always with me my mobile' is incorrect; it should be 'my mobile is always with me'. 'List getting the tiered' is incorrect; it should be 'list getting tired'. Also, 'water wet' should be 'wet with water'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.