List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb tenses and improve sentence clarity. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure your answer is natural and concise. For example, say 'Yes, I make a list when I go shopping because it helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting items.'

例: Yes, I make a list when I go shopping because it helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting items.

提案: Focus on using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, 'Yes, I make a list for my work. It helps me manage my time efficiently and also allows me to balance my studies.'

例: Yes, I make a list for my work. It helps me manage my time efficiently and also allows me to balance my studies.

提案: Clarify your ideas and use relevant vocabulary. Avoid confusing phrases. For example, 'Some people dislike making lists because they think it wastes time, and they prefer to work or shop directly without planning.'

例: Some people dislike making lists because they think it wastes time, and they prefer to work or shop directly without planning.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, 'I prefer making lists on my phone because it is safer and more convenient than paper, which can be easily lost or damaged.'

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is safer and more convenient than paper, which can be easily lost or damaged.

× Yes, I made list when I went to show because it is quite easy to making a list, not indulging in any other difficulty.

✓ Yes, I made a list when I went to shop because it is quite easy to make a list, not involving any other difficulty.

The word 'list' is countable and requires an article 'a' before it. 'Show' is a typo and should be 'shop'. 'Making' should be 'make' after 'easy to'. 'Indulging' is incorrect here; 'involving' fits the context better.

× Yes, I made list for how I work.

✓ Yes, I made a list for how I work.

Again, 'list' is countable and needs the article 'a' before it.

× It works very efficiently and very useful to me as it makes me makes me helping in the time management and allowing in the studies also.

✓ It works very efficiently and is very useful to me as it helps me with time management and also allows me to study.

The phrase 'makes me makes me helping' is incorrect and redundant. 'Helping' should be replaced with 'helps me with' to correctly express assistance. 'Allowing in the studies' is awkward; 'allows me to study' is correct.

× Some people do not like making English because they thought that it is the spending of time to make English.

✓ Some people do not like making lists because they think that it is a waste of time to make lists.

'Making English' is incorrect; it should be 'making lists' as per context. 'Thought' should be 'think' to match present tense. 'The spending of time' is awkward; 'a waste of time' is the correct expression.

× On the other hand, to make to directly work or directly shop anything.

✓ On the other hand, they prefer to work or shop directly without making a list.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'they prefer' clarifies the subject. 'To make to directly work' is incorrect; rephrased for clarity.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone as it is safe in my phone as well as on the paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone as it is safe there, unlike paper.

'Safe in my phone' is awkward; 'safe there' is better. 'As well as on the paper' is unclear; 'unlike paper' clarifies the contrast.

× We we fell we were disappointed when our paper removed or felt sad when we kept the paper anywhere.

✓ We feel disappointed when our paper is lost or feel sad when we keep the paper anywhere.

Repeated 'we' is a typo. 'Fell' should be 'feel' to match present tense. 'Our paper removed' is incorrect; 'paper is lost' is correct passive form. Sentence restructured for clarity.