List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'when I stop' instead of 'when I shop' and 'prevent from taking impulsive decision' instead of 'prevent me from making impulsive decisions'. Try to use correct prepositions and plural forms. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save time and money. Moreover, it prevents me from making impulsive decisions, which is very convenient.

提案: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'make a list from my work' and 'list of my tags'. Try to use clearer expressions such as 'make a to-do list for my work' and explain what 'tags' means or use a more common term. Also, improve sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I always make a to-do list for my work, no matter how busy I am. For instance, on busy days, I list my tasks in order of priority so that I can complete important work first and manage my workload effectively.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and lacks coherence. Avoid short, incomplete sentences like 'Lists.' and 'Spontaneous decision.' Instead, use full sentences and linking words to make your ideas flow logically. Also, clarify your points with specific reasons and examples.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they find them restrictive. They prefer to make spontaneous decisions and enjoy the freedom of buying things moment by moment without feeling pressured.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'There is phone on the hand of every person' and 'We it is secure with us as well.' Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because we live in a digital era and carry our phones everywhere. Since everyone has a phone, it is convenient and secure to keep my lists there.

× Yes, I make a list when I stop.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I shop.

The student mistakenly used 'stop' instead of 'shop'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar issue, but since it affects the meaning, it should be corrected to 'shop' to match the question context.

× It helps me to prevent from taking impulsive decision as well.

✓ It helps me to prevent taking impulsive decisions as well.

The phrase 'prevent from taking' is incorrect. The verb 'prevent' is directly followed by the gerund without 'from'. Also, 'decision' should be plural 'decisions' to match the context of multiple impulsive choices.

× Yes, I always make a list from my work regardless of how busy I am.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for my work regardless of how busy I am.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here. The correct preposition is 'for' when indicating the purpose of making a list.

× In this way I can complete my work on the priority basis without having the workload.

✓ In this way, I can complete my work on a priority basis without having a heavy workload.

The phrase 'on the priority basis' is incorrect; it should be 'on a priority basis'. Also, 'the workload' is vague; adding 'heavy' clarifies the meaning. The sentence also needs a comma after 'In this way' for clarity.

× Lists. I think some people don't like making lists because they might find it restrictive and they like taking it. Spontaneous decision.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they might find it restrictive and prefer making spontaneous decisions.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'Lists.' and 'Spontaneous decision.' are incomplete sentences. The correction combines ideas into a coherent sentence and uses 'prefer making spontaneous decisions' to express the intended meaning.

× Some people find freedom on purchasing things moment by moment without any pressure.

✓ Some people find freedom in purchasing things moment by moment without any pressure.

The correct preposition after 'find freedom' is 'in', not 'on'.

× I always prefer to make a list on my phone.

✓ I always prefer to make a list on my phone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× There is phone on the hand of every person, every next person you see.

✓ There is a phone in the hand of every person you see.

The sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'There is phone on the hand' should be 'There is a phone in the hand'. Also, 'every next person you see' is redundant; 'every person you see' suffices.

× We it is secure with us as well.

✓ We keep it secure with us as well.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Adding 'keep' clarifies the meaning, making it 'We keep it secure with us as well.'