List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: तपाईंको उत्तर राम्रो छ तर केही वाक्यहरू लामो र अलिकति दोहोरिएको छन्। तपाईंले वाक्यहरूलाई छोटो र स्पष्ट बनाउन सक्नुहुन्छ र लिंकिङ शब्दहरू प्रयोग गरेर उत्तरलाई अझ प्रभावकारी बनाउन सक्नुहुन्छ।

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized and avoid impulsive purchases. For example, it reduces my stress about managing money and ensures I buy only what I need.

提案: तपाईंको उत्तरमा केही वाक्यहरू अस्पष्ट छन् र 'like a magic' जस्तो अभिव्यक्ति अनौपचारिक छ। तपाईंले स्पष्ट र औपचारिक भाषा प्रयोग गर्नुपर्छ र लिंकिङ शब्दहरू थप्नुपर्छ।

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay focused and organized. Consequently, I can complete tasks before the deadline and impress my supervisors. Overall, making a schedule works very effectively for me.

提案: तपाईंको उत्तर राम्रो छ तर 'making this' को सट्टा 'making lists' भन्नु राम्रो हुन्छ। साथै, लिंकिङ शब्द थपेर उत्तरलाई अझ स्पष्ट बनाउन सकिन्छ।

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they find it restrictive. Moreover, they prefer to make decisions spontaneously since they believe it gives them the freedom they need.

提案: तपाईंको उत्तर अधुरो छ र अन्त्यमा वाक्य पूरा भएको छैन। कृपया पूर्ण वाक्य प्रयोग गर्नुहोस् र लिंकिङ शब्दहरू थप्नुहोस्। साथै, केही शब्दहरू सुधार गर्नुपर्छ जस्तै 'with safety' लाई 'safely' भन्नु।

例: I prefer to make a list on my phone because we carry it everywhere in this digital age. Therefore, it is safer and more convenient than paper lists, which can be easily lost. Additionally, digital lists can be easily edited whenever needed.

× It is very convenient and easier.

✓ It is very convenient and easy.

The adjective 'easy' should be used instead of the comparative form 'easier' because it is being compared to nothing in this context. Using 'easier' without a comparison is incorrect.

× I don't have to take any stress for how to manage fund and I don't make any impulsive decision when I have a list, I have a clear instruction what to buy.

✓ I don't have to take any stress about how to manage funds and I don't make any impulsive decisions when I have a list; I have clear instructions on what to buy.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'about' is the correct preposition to express concern. Also, 'fund' should be plural 'funds' to indicate money in general. 'Decision' should be plural 'decisions' because it refers to multiple instances. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' and 'what to buy' needs the preposition 'on' to be grammatically correct.

× As I always make a list for my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

✓ As I always make a list of my work, it helps me to stay focused and organized.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; 'of' is the correct preposition to indicate the content of the list.

× This way I can finish my work before deadline and I can impress the person for whom I am working.

✓ This way I can finish my work before the deadline and I can impress the person for whom I am working.

The phrase 'before deadline' requires the definite article 'the' before 'deadline' to be grammatically correct.

× And it is good for me as well.

✓ And it is good for me as well.

This sentence is correct; no article error here.

× It works like a magic every time when I make a schedule for my task.

✓ It works like magic every time I make a schedule for my task.

The phrase 'like a magic' is incorrect; 'magic' is an uncountable noun here and does not need the article 'a'. Also, 'when' can be omitted for smoother flow.

× I think some people don't like making this because they find it restrictive and they might like taking decisions moment by moment because they believe that's the freedom they need.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they find it restrictive and might like making decisions moment by moment because they believe that's the freedom they need.

The pronoun 'this' is incorrect; it should be 'lists' to refer to the activity. Also, 'taking decisions' is less common than 'making decisions' in this context.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because this is the digital age and we carry our phone everywhere we go.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because this is the digital age and we carry our phones everywhere we go.

The noun 'phone' should be plural 'phones' because it refers to the phones that people carry, not just one phone.

× We keep our phone with safety and we don't have to worry about losing paper.

✓ We keep our phones safe and we don't have to worry about losing paper.

The phrase 'with safety' is incorrect; 'safe' is the correct adjective. Also, 'phone' should be plural 'phones' to match 'our'.

× When we have list on our phone, it is safe and secure with us and we can edit it and.

✓ When we have a list on our phone, it is safe and secure with us and we can edit it easily.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object after 'and'. Also, 'list' needs the article 'a'. Adding 'easily' completes the thought and improves clarity.