List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "when I saw" instead of "when I shop" and "It has to manage my time" which is unclear. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. Use linking words like "because" or "so" appropriately to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me manage my time efficiently and makes the experience more convenient. Therefore, I prefer preparing my list before going shopping to avoid forgetting anything.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical mistakes such as "it manage" instead of "it manages" and "bear with the world pressure" which is unclear. Try to use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repetition and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect your points logically.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work because it helps me manage my time and reduces work-related stress. As a result, I feel less pressured and more organized throughout the day.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by avoiding informal phrases like "that's why" at the end and by providing more specific reasons. Also, try to use linking words such as "because" and "and" to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I think some people dislike making lists because they find it restrictive and unnecessary, and they may feel too lazy to write notes regularly.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by combining sentences to avoid starting with "Because" and by using linking words to make the answer more coherent. Also, try to add a concluding sentence to summarize your preference.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone rather than on paper because I carry my phone everywhere, making it more convenient. Additionally, I can easily add or remove items, which makes the process more enjoyable and efficient.

× Yes, I make a list when I saw because it makes my shopping experience more flexible and convenient.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I shop because it makes my shopping experience more flexible and convenient.

The verb 'saw' is past tense and does not fit the present tense context of the question. The correct verb is 'shop' to match the present tense question 'Do you make a list when you shop?'.

× It has to manage my time and I can enjoy the overall shopping experience.

✓ It helps me manage my time and I can enjoy the overall shopping experience.

The phrase 'It has to manage my time' is incorrect because 'has to' implies obligation, which is not intended here. The correct expression is 'helps me manage' to indicate assistance.

× So I prefer making this before I go to shopping.

✓ So I prefer making this before I go shopping.

The phrase 'go to shopping' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' without the preposition 'to'.

× As I make a list for my work, it helps to manage my time and it manage the work pressure.

✓ As I make a list for my work, it helps to manage my time and it manages the work pressure.

The verb 'manage' should be in third person singular form 'manages' to agree with the subject 'it'.

× I don't have to bear with the world pressure and it doesn't stress me out.

✓ I don't have to bear the work pressure and it doesn't stress me out.

The phrase 'bear with' means to be patient with someone, which is incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'bear the work pressure'. Also, 'world pressure' seems to be a typo for 'work pressure'.

× I think some people don't like making lists because they find it restrictive and unnecessary, and they might be lazy to write those notes, that's why.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they find it restrictive and unnecessary, and they might be lazy to write those notes; that's why.

The sentence is a run-on sentence. Using a semicolon before 'that's why' correctly separates the clauses.

× Because I carry my phone everywhere I go, it is more convenient than paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because I carry my phone everywhere I go; it is more convenient than paper.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' followed by a comma and a main clause can cause sentence fragments. Combining the sentences improves clarity and correctness.